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Not Going To Stay
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Not Going To Stay |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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“NOT GOING TO STAY” by Bill Charles ~~~~ Bye-bye baby, today’s when I’ll be leaving, just tired of the continued pain and grieving, and tears that make me all bleary-eyed, there’s not much left, not much more inside… Bye-bye baby, guess I’m getting out of here, tired of me not knowing how much you care, I pampered you with all of loves passion, but finally got the message of rejection… So bye-bye baby, I’m going down the road, guess our time together was only borrowed, I need to clear my head inside anyway, it was nice, but I’m not going to stay… ~~~~ |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
I like this poem, Sometimes you just gotta cut your losses and ditch the....ummm...lady..=). It flowed very nicely and the rymes didn't seem forced. good stuff, Joe |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Such a sad write..but very exquisitely done, Bill.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This one is kinda sad.... But, when you're losing it's best to leave!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Guess you gotta know when to hold 'em and know when to fold 'em. Oh..no...that's something else..you know what I mean. Exellent write Bill. Hug, Nancy ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"rejection" ... such an empty insulting feeling ... man I hate that ... I could relate to this one sir. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Bill, this one sounds like a "Bluesy" song. Did you put music to it? I hope this is not written from personal experience. It's so sad, but beautiful just the same.  "To be in love with love is truly to love".....by Paladin |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Darn, sorry you're feeling down. Maybe moving on will bring you some joy and happiness. If you need someone to dance the night away with, I'm sure there would be a long line of willing ladies from here at Passions.  Huggles for better days, Marti |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
BC ~ This has such a ring of real to it... If this is your story, you surely must know by now that you have many a "passion"ate female reader who would think she's off her rocker!  Comforting hugs --and a tickle to put the smile back on your face! EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (05-13-2003 01:04 PM).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
BC, I can hear the music every time I read it. . . great work. . . --------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Bill, The road should always be as open as the door. For the sake of ourselves, the feelings you have expressed so well must be the invitation to better things. Hugs, TD |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
How very sad...I hope this is just words that are flowing into music and not what is really happening in your life....Take care... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
one of your best  nice |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
great write It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you. |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Bill...Sometimes, you have to experience the blues so that you can really feel the blues. This poem was sad and touched me deeply. I know what it is to be on the receiving end of rejection. But, when neither side is benefiting from the relationship, it is better to go your separate ways...both freed to find that one who will love them the way they both deserve to be. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill...Love can make you sad or glad...wishing you happiness down the road, my friend...and many more songs!  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Made me think of relationships where I wanted to stay and didn't have the desire or power to leave until finally the truth started sinking in that I was not happy with the relationship and didn't see much hope for it to get better...James |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
If I were to receive a note of goodbye, I would hope it would be as gentle as this. Nicely penned, Bill. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Must be that fresh air... There must be new mountains to climb, eh BCI?...  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Bill, this is so very heartfelt, sweet friend, this is a sad goodbye sentiment but yet it is spoken with most sincerity and I think any love who would ever read a letter like this would understand! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bill, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bill: you just penned a nice blues tune here strum it . . . you'll see *smile* just for me - k? xxoo |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh Bill this one makes me think "how comes this lady-baby dares to reject your love?" A very good poem, showing your great sensitivity. Better go and breathe some fresh air! Love, Margherita |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I agree with Marti...I will be standing in the line with, I am sure, many other Passionettes waiting for a dance with you. Like this one much. Tells it the way it is! -Patricia |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang, this is not like you at all! get back to your old romantic self! |
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