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Oblivion Bliss
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Oblivion Bliss |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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My sword is silv’ry smooth. A streaking starlight Bloodied crimson By storms of straight And wide eyed failure. Isn’t it ironic, How you see a flash And grin again? Thinking Fireworks hit skies. It’s all beautiful… How my body’s Beaten bruising, Leaves you artwork To enjoy! Its your Oblivion bliss, And naive laughter There’s war, And all your beach fun, Sand dune burials Are fallen soldiers Left behind. - And so it was that time stood still - (blink, breathe, stand, fight) [This message has been edited by GG (05-09-2003 05:42 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very strong write |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, Go back to bed, grins... Phew, eyes wide, at your imagery and symbolism...indeed, this is true. Very powerful, Hugs and love ya, Pat  |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Dixie, thank you I guess you're right!Pat, you go back to bed!  Thanks for the comments. Glad to see you find it powerful.. and yes, ok ok, so my imagination does get the best of me sometimes. But its derived from truth! Hugs and love, Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Hey G - where have you been missy? miss you much . . . you know - you brought me to about four different places here . . . the battered bruises . . . miss your writing Alyssa xxoo |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Got no idea what you mean but the read was excellent.......moon, stars, sand dunes and all of that lovely metaphorical presentation. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...very powerful! Eric |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Seems the whole fireworks can go both ways, dearest friend, it is a discouraging feeling and I hope now you have found a tournqiuet to heal the blood loss! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Alyssa, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
littlewing, I know I know, I've been soooo busy lately. I'd swear someone must have taken a good 10 hours off the day! I miss reading and writing too! Thanks for the comments and hope all is well for you! Ethome, lol thank you, I tend to have weird subjects, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll explain what its about... the sword is about spiritual battle that we're always in. The flash is about the flash left when you fight what soeone else can't handle, but they see it as just fireworks because they are blind. The wounds I take for them aren't seen except as funny, and the sand dune burials are about them playing in the sand, y'know how you bury people.. this is saying they are burying actual dead bodies that were killed in battle. that probably made less sense then the poem! lol, but thank you - And so it was that time stood still - |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Ericc, thank you very much, I'm glad you think so Noah, oh I'm afraid to say but no matter how much love I have and is given to me, I'll still be bleeding because the love only gives me something more to fight for. And try as I may, I still get stabbed.. alot!! But yes, I do have comfort and I know the war is won Thank you!Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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