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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
As I Close my Tired, so tired, Drooping, pleading, Eyelids, and I slowly yawn, I stop and I turn To the sky And I Pray Yeah...I know...Didn't do this right but it was a first attempt and who said there had to be straight and narrow rules, right? lol I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. --Chang Tzu [This message has been edited by KoKo (04-16-2003 12:47 AM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Lauren: as far as I see it - when rules overcome heart then you might as well stop writing This is beautiful - its the message that counts (hehe I did a sonnet that was not a "pure" sonnet - it still counted) xxoo |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
lol, thanks littlewing! You've just made my night much better  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
In this case who cares about the rules this is nice!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Awww...this is so pretty. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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quatro Member
since 2003-04-29
Posts 392Galveston, Texas |
I try not to pray when I get so tired because I end up not finishing the prayer and I'm afraid that I'm losing out on something. Anyway, nicely done. Keep experimenting. quatro |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Lauren, this is a true gem from your heart, sweet friend, we all send angel hugs your way as you truly are always blessed by Him as we all are! (kiss on cheek) May your weary head always find comfort with the light, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Shlee Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 72USA |
Love it, absolutely. |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Oh a KoKo poem! Hi KoKo  This is lovely little piece! Wow, you don't know how much I relate to this right now. I haven't slept in around 40 hours and I'm just sitting lost inside myself right now LOL I think a little prayer like this shall do me good! Mike |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
KoKo, very good poem I really liked it Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
KoKo, as May 1 is known in some areas as the National Day of Prayer... I think you did just fine! BTTT with you! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is wonderful! Nothing better than to fall asleep with a prayer in the heart ... even if it is not finished ... And really there is no need for strict rules .... when the heart expresses itself so beautifully. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I would love to echo littlewing's reply and add that I think this is simply beautiful! Love & Eternal Light, EA |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is simply wonderful. No idea what you were trying to use, but, this form reads well and the message great. I could not want for more. Enjoyed greatly, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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