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And When You Finally Get The Chance To See... |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
I found a lonely trail one eve While strolling through the darkness A sparkling way of rainbow gleamed Beneath the glimmering stars. Of course a person curious Would be so inclined to follow On tip-toes edge down this dreamy path Where the starlight seemed to wallow... What not I knew but soon would find Was surprising, even to me... This pathway led into a soul; A quiet, empty plea. The farther that I chased this end The heavier the air became, And my lungs became aware at once... Something's not the same. Where happiness once rested in The nooks of pearly dents A haunting sheer of ice now hung In dark and dripping tents. And over there is loneliness, In comfort's hidden place. What now is bland and dull grayness Once lay a pillow of lace. I turned away and saw ahead A knobless wooden door... And in shocking deja vu my eyes Read the sign once more. "The Door Into Your Heart" it read And I could not define The meaning of these silent words... "Your?"...Is this soul mine? I rotated slow as the turn Of a lazy summer day And suddenly I recognized The strings that this soul played. Old Loneliness, my only friend (Ironic, yes, I know,) Had been there for so very long Through the winter's harsh, cold snow... And the ice that chilled this empty soul No longer seemed foreboding, In fact it gave a homey feel After the day's unloading... What started as a mistic dream Became fatality.... A crumbled, vicious stumble Into reality. And chancing one look back Towards the knobless wooden door, I turned and waved a hand at it... My eyes could see No More. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. --Chang Tzu [This message has been edited by KoKo (04-13-2003 02:34 PM).] |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Wonderful, heartfelt, writing...Just remember now-a-days it doesn't always take a doorknob to open a door...the heart opens wide when we least expect it...I pray joy and love fill your life... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This really is very deep and touching! A journey of the searching soul...we sometimes fear to look close, but the close look promises healing. Love, Margherita |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Koko, I am enthralled by this one and the feelings that you painted onto the canvas here! Very much enjoyed reading your thoughts today....  Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very beautiful read this morning. Love your use of color here! Extremely well done! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
another beautiful write. i'm proud of you hon! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Startime: Thank you very, very much! You're right. Thank you for reminding me  Margherita: Thank you very much! Thank you, also, for reminding me.Sunnyone: Thanks much!!!! Nancy: Wow, thanks!!! ^_^ Eddles: O_O Proud!!! ~huggles~ Thanks so much Eddles!! ~hugs to all~ Thanks everyone!!!!!  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...this one touched me...beautiful visual presentation, the melancholic theme, the rhyming, the ending, the personal relation I have to it....just a great piece...one for my library! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thanks a ton, passing shadows. That really means a lot to me. Thank you very, very much I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes we all need to see the real us...James |
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karebear07 Member
since 2003-04-15
Posts 64Texas |
New roads open in our life all the time. We have to look at them and see if really we want to go that way. Keep writing those beutiful words. -Kara <>< |
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