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Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

0 posted 2003-05-03 07:27 PM

Until The Rising Sun

Strong arms enfold her close
within a warm embrace
Under moonlight they pose
with passions eyes ablaze

A sigh escapes her lips
reddened by burning kiss
Along her ear he nips
on loves sensual bliss

Sounds of the night enhance
emotions that run high
The music of the dance
natures own lullaby

Black velvet all around
enfolds this midnight pair
As tiny lights surround
and still they’re unaware

Engulfed in loves desire
two hearts that beat as one
The glades ablaze with fire
until the rising sun

Startime

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-05-03 07:35 PM

*Engulfed in loves desire
two hearts that beat as one

the lines that tell it!

It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you.

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

2 posted 2003-05-04 05:48 AM

I very much enjoyed this!

Will keep it for later...

Richy

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2003-05-04 10:18 AM

You certainly have not lost your touch...

Ya gets my vote!! No question of it...

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2003-05-04 10:21 AM

Startime55,
I think you said it very well, enjoyed.

Zaynab
Member

since 2003-05-04

Posts 59
Kuwait

5 posted 2003-05-04 10:24 AM

I really enjoyed this poem. The rhyme scheme wasn't forced at all, and the poem felt smooth and soft as well as passionate.

Well done, and take care

Zaynab

Kill me tonight and I will love again
Leave me to live and I live in pain
Leave me no love and I live in vain
Kill me tonight and kill the pain

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2003-05-04 10:28 AM

The glades ablaze with fire~
Great line Startime~

Love the raw passion in this.
(almost forgot to vote)
I need coffee.

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-04-2003 10:29 AM).]

CountryGal
Junior Member

since 2003-03-09

Posts 24
Missouri, USA

7 posted 2003-05-04 10:30 AM

I like this poem. Very good.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

8 posted 2003-05-04 11:41 AM

'Engulfed in loves desire
two hearts that beat as one
The glades ablaze with fire
until the rising sun'

Time to draw the blinds then...

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

9 posted 2003-05-04 12:07 PM

SIZZLING!
You always make the reader gasp with pleasure.

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

10 posted 2003-05-04 12:31 PM

Startime...Positively GORGEOUS poem!!! Passionate and seductive all at the same time. You are the true Queen of romance. ***Ivy Rose

[This message has been edited by Ivy Rose (05-04-2003 12:32 PM).]

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2003-05-04 05:21 PM

Enjoyed...James

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