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Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2003-05-03 10:41 AM

It was just a run down bar,
...in fact it had no name,
Every night its clientele,
...most always was the same,
As it was that Saturday night,
...way back in sixty-four,
All the drunks were nursing beers,
...when she walked in the door.
For the joint and neighborhood,
...she clearly did not fit,
A simple grace and elegance,
...it mattered not a whit,
For when your world lies in a glass,
...there is no need to glance,
At passerbyes who can't intrude;
...can't pierce your stupored trance.
She sat alone atop a stool,
...Old Mike, he brought a beer,
No order made, there was no need,
...a glass did just appear.
The air was tepid as was the foam,
...that blanketed her beer,
As from her eye into her glass,
...there dropped a single tear.
Two a.m., came closing time,
...although bar's clock was broken,
Not a sip by her partaken,
...not a word was ever spoken.
She left her stool, went out the door,
...from a bar without a name,
Without a glance from those within,
...who still remained; the same.

[This message has been edited by Tim (05-03-2003 12:02 PM).]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-05-03 10:50 AM

Just a moment's reprieve
for hearts who hear,
as the last call was placed,
in a pub called Cheers...

~*~

oops...
home run, Tim...
once again.

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

2 posted 2003-05-03 11:35 AM

I enjoyed

Tara

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2003-05-03 12:27 PM

smiling--the place sounds haunted, Tim.

This was a bit different than what I am accustomed to from you, but still has your trademark grace and elegance.

Perfect meter and great flow, of course.

Enjoyed.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2003-05-03 12:44 PM

Damn Tim:

amazing writing
made my heart sink a bit there
this IS a tear . . .
xxoo

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

5 posted 2003-05-05 09:33 AM

Very insightful, m'friend - You've captured the life within the walls of local pubs everywhere...Nicely done..

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