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The Cycle |
Balladeer
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They enter through the arches in the early morning light. Young, healthy bodies move along with faces just as bright As spotlights, pouring out enthusiasm as they make their way. The workers at McDonald's have begun another day. Although it is a menial nook, you'll hear no one complain Or have an incongenial outlook similar to pain. Their whole lives lie before them and, like many, they've begun By serving skinny burgers on a sesame seed bun. Our future doctors fix the fries and nurses pour the shakes. There is no pharmacist alive who doesn't know it takes Three seconds for the meat to thaw or how to fill a cup, Our future lawyers serve it - future bankers ring it up. They're going to be successes, each and every single one And, if you ask, my guess is they will say before they're done, They will all be rich and famous. Isn't that what Life's about? The world is waiting patiently and they're just starting out. So there they stand. The innocence of youth is on parade. No possibility of failure lies in plans well-laid. Amid the fries and apple pies, with ketchup on their hands The leaders of our country's newest generation stand. ...............* * * * * ** * * *............... He enters through the arches in the silent dead of night. His uniform is threadbare and a badge reflects the light From streetlamps bouncing off the valleys of a time-worn, wrinkled face. In motion and emotionless, the store guard takes his place. He checks the doors around the store, makes periodic rounds, His ears long since accustomed to all strange, nocturnal sounds Then settles in a back booth near the corner of the wall And lets his mind roam aimlessly on nothing much at all. If one could turn the pages back, oh, fifty years or so To see the lad that this man represented long ago One could have seen a bright, young boy set out to make his mark Instead of this aged, huddled figure sitting in the dark. But something passed along the years he did not understand And adolescent dreams did not turn out as he had planned. His hopes to turn the world around were met and neutralized By resentment and indifference in Humanity's cold eyes. No audience applauded as they did for picture shows Depicting heroes conquering unconquerable foes. No background music played to guide him - not one single song, No happy endings out of novels ever came along. His goals turned into gallstones as the years passed endlessly. Opportunity knocked at times but he had lost the key. Enthusiasm turned to spasms only seconds long That left behind a bitter man who wondered what went wrong. His anger turned to hatred as the years went marching on, Then hate turned to indifference-then even that was gone. Now, sitting in the back booth with his head slumped to his chest, A previous leader of our current generation rests. ...............* * * * * * * * * *............... They enter through the arches in the early morning light. He opens up the doors for them, smiles vaguely, says goodnight Then shuffles down the sidewalk of a lonely, one-way street, Arrives at home and goes to bed - the cycle is complete. [This message has been edited by Balladeer (02-17-2003 10:14 PM).] |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'd vote for this if you'd checked the submission box, Deer... ... Because it's pretty darned good... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling at Nan---I was kinda wondering too. This guy has a kinda knack for meter, huh? |
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Nan
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Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Of course I could "assume" he wants it submitted and fix it... but that'd just get me in deep trouble... and I've got enough of that trying to figure out how to shovel myself out tomorrow... |
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Balladeer
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oops! All fixed....thank you, ladies |
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Nan
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Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
All righty then... Voting here - This is one of my favorites, Deer... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh yes.... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Love this, 'Deer...glad you fixed it for voting purposes. "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
'bout time you showed up. I was getting worried and was going to post one of yours for you! You always have my vote. |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Beautiful poem.. Thanks for sharing! Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
funny, I did my time working at Mickey Dee's, I had my regular early morning customers, older folks, that I adored. There was one gentleman, that would always be so kind, and when he got back from one of his famous trips to Reno, he'd come give me a silver dollar, and tell me not to tell the other girls, then he'd make his way to the next girl, and do the same thing. My mom still has those silver dollars in a safe deposit box....I'll never forget him LOL all this just to tell you, this poem touched me, but in a different way... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Oh my gosh, if only I could imagine this kind of condition, dearest friend, I haven't gotten a job yet other than doing volunteer and community service, I suppose I need to immerse myself out more in society and behold what many others like me are doing and what they hope to accomplish! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, a strong message for our youth and I hope to see this in the next book, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Michael, Glad to know that I get to vote for this. Excellent as usual! My vote is in. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Well, Mr. Balladeer....where ya been??? You know you got my vote... Ethel |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
So glad you submitted this for the book Deer...it's one of my favourites from you. Voting! Maree |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A wonderful submission for the book, Michael. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
Narrationally exceptional. I like the way the individual in this poem is characterised. It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
reading you is always a treat Charisma |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Shall I say that I missed classic poetry from the master Balladeer? Dear Sir, I am always left in awe with your words.. this one is even more special, if it can be said... Regards, Sudhir |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I am curtsying, bowing and genuflecting before you in all humility, my Dear Master Storyteller/Poet!!! Warm HUGS! Linda |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
The answer is YES, what would any book be without a submission for Balladeer? |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Love this one Balladeer. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This, Balladeer, is just wonderful. Indeed, it is the current theme that our lives revolve entirely around our career goals... the first thing you're asked when you meet someone new is what you do for a living, and somehow that defines people and their accomplishments - how much money they make, what their contribution is to society. There are ways to contribute to the world that aren't career-based. Whatever career I end up with, it's not going to be my contribution to the world... it's going to be how I make money, that's all. It's tragic that we must set our goals so specifically, and feel as though we've failed when they don't turn out quite like we planned. So touching that you capture the tragedy of a life unappreciated. Indeed, he recieves no audience to applaud... but your tribute is more than applause. This is the kind of poem that makes your username so accurate. Excellent work, my friend. This earns my vote. Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
in it goes! btw have you already published "a hole in my chest" (in think its called - i mean the one about the young soldier who dies in the speaker's arms)? if not you really ought to submitt it for this collection. -majnu |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Indeed!! I love this.... Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
LOL I lived on MacDonalds burgers and fries for over a half year back then in the seventies, I bet it's still there somewhere in Bethesda, Maryland. As usual a beautiful, true life story poem you wrote here Deer. You always know how to turn simple things into delicious delights. Such a pleasure to read you pal I've cast my vote, may it become you well Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi there Michael...voting here! : |
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Balladeer
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Thank you all for your wondeful support and votes. I appreciate you all.. Local Parasite..yes, this is the way I like to write. I used to live up to my name way back when....thank you for the comment. Manju...Small Pain in my Chest was included in the first Passions book. Thanks for enjoying it... |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Balladeer...Enjoyed...Paul Where would we be Without Mickey D I'll take a number three "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It wouldnt be a PIPS book without your wisdom rhymes and cadence cool. " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
i respect this, i respect you. (i think i already said that? oh well) |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I love it, I voted for it, but sit shaking my head wondering if you could take a request for just ONE that I don't cry after it is finished, just one! ~* Carpe' Diem *~ [This message has been edited by Mysteria (02-19-2003 01:35 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This get's my vote, it's one of my favourites. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It's certainly nice to know you mess up on something... even if it's just on submission details. *G* For your pen doesn't make a mistake when it tells a tale so well... Love this, Deer one. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Of course this is going in 'Deer One... I LOVED IT!!! My heart went out to your guy as I read..... Bridgette |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Nice message in a nice package. Lots to learn from this 'un. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Never did time at the Big M, but I did a stint at Baker's Better Burgers and Tacos. Truth told, it was some of the best times spent with good friends. A lot of fond memories. Sir Balladeer, this one gets my vote for content, style and feel. I bow to you and yours. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mike, I wouldn't miss a vote for you. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
I remember this poem, Mike - It was a long time ago, but I still remember it. This poem and your "Statue in Central Park" poem are two of my favorites. I could hardly let this slip by without a vote. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Mr. Balladeer THis is one of the greatest comentaries on the simple man, and to have you recite it to me was a thrill. Your story telling abilities are unmatched as you pick up on the obvious but unrecognized bits of life and weave them into the perfect poem Warm poetic hugs Liz |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Deer...you know..I love this one... |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
This is one I have always liked, from the first time I found it and read it. Very sad but wise poem, Balladeer. --Liz It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got... |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Touching...absolutely. When you think you have heard it all, |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Well his cycle is near complete. Pity the ol' boy, hope he had a few moments on his cycle where the wind caressed his hair and he was so balanced he felt flight. Well done |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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One of my all-time favorites, 'Deer! I'm glad it will be in the book! |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
This is a wonderful write and deserves recognition in a wider audience. I am voting for it! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Oh you do tell a tale. Joyce |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, I am speechless. You make this look easy, this very heavy topic, put to rhyme. Sandra |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
there is no one who can write these ballads as well as you Michael. Always rolling off the tongue and so smooth on the ear. M |
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Poet deVine
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Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Just checked to see if I'd read this yet. I guess so, but what's the harm in a bump? |
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rodger_jr Junior Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 37Glen Hope, PA |
Ruth has read this one to me before, liked it then, like it now |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
Just goes to show that everyone has their purpose...no matter what it is. Granted, lost dreams are an entire different story... great job...I'll vote. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
I loved this one the first time I read and I think I love even more now You have definately got my vote. How could we not have such talent in the book? Tara "wake me up inside call my name and save me from the dark" -Bring Me To Life by Evanescence [This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (03-21-2003 10:22 PM).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
This is awesome, you always have a way of serving your poetry just right. Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent. [This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (03-22-2003 12:59 PM).] |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Enjoyed. Dawn |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hugsss you......enjoy your words much! Lauren~ I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yep, I already read it.....and voted..... but, just a quick |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I loved it. Susan |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Deer it is lovely and I love it. Excellent writing and outstanding. Very well written love and warm stuff as always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Denise
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Wish I could vote again! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
You know, I never worked at McD's, does that mean I missed the cycle or just made my own? I joined the Navy when I was 17. Before that I worked in food service, and officially got my bum pinched at the age of 14 by a man old enough to be my dad. He tipped me $10. I was happy.... Great write, I really enjoyed it. Susan [This message has been edited by Susan Caldwell (03-25-2003 12:18 PM).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I know I already voted for this, so I had to look at the ratings to see why on earth it was not on the already accepted list. I know I can't vote again but I wish I could. I guess because it is a 2 page poem, but it is truly worth it. Love, Joyce |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Rest, Dear Friend, Rest.... Awesome writing there 'Deer.... This one definitely gets my vote. |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you for all of the awesome comments and heartfelt replies. I appreciate you... Susan...ten bucks for a bum pinch? I'd be happy, too!!! |
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Balladeer
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Stop that!!! [This message has been edited by Balladeer (03-25-2003 02:42 PM).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
good grief!!!! It's gone berzerk!! [This message has been edited by Balladeer (03-25-2003 02:41 PM).] |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh but it is so worth more than $10 now!! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wow. I love the way you intertwined both parts of the poem at the end you get my vote! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Back to the top... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Why, thank you, LArry!! Susan...I'll mortgage the house!! |
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waldopepper Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 157Tennessee, USA |
I give it two all-beef votes, with lettuce, pickles, tomatoes, onions, special sauce, on a sesame seed bun! This is a grand cycle indeed! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
never worked at Macdonalds but worked at KFC for a while and remember those youthful dreams very well...how we will move on to better things, how the world is our oyster etc etc... i guess i will tell you several decades later whether i have evolved to be the man as described in your poem.. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Oh Mike. Another one for the Ballad King. Excellent job my dear friend. Marilyn |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
ok I know I can't say anything that hasn't been said, and I now its already in the book... but I can't help myself, This is great. And any poem this long that can keep my attention must be the best! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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