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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-04-30 03:09 PM


I can not tear the words
That in this soul, swirl,
Unsung
From such coarse
Language as I speak.

I have tried,

Late nights spent in sweat
Shaping tongue around rough edged syllables
That do not justice to the inner pure
And leave my mind and mouth
Bleeding…

But still…
I feel as if the perfect music
Could be formed
As words drop
    On a scale
SING
    Or strum
The real.

Would that I was talented…
And patience my form
To pick sounds slow
And harmony be born

Yet…
     I ply these thoughts
             For some true song
A poem
             Phrased
In syllabic symphony
To just once…
Once…
Say it all.

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (04-30-2003 03:14 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-04-30 03:18 PM



About time you posted this one here...especially after it's reception the first time around!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

Enchantress
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2 posted 2003-04-30 03:25 PM


YES!!!! click!
serenity blaze
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3 posted 2003-04-30 03:50 PM


grinning like the insane woman that I am...



CLICK


Sunkissed
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4 posted 2003-04-30 04:49 PM


You've just been voted for.

Love this!

Sunkissed.

Cpat Hair
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5 posted 2003-04-30 05:06 PM


Thanks all.. may make the book may not..
but wanted to give it a chance anyway...

appreciate all the support and the comments.

Duncan
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6 posted 2003-05-01 12:09 PM


Would've been here sooner but I got distracted...
Poet deVine
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7 posted 2003-05-01 01:40 AM




Glad someone brought this up.

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8 posted 2003-05-01 10:34 AM




   Click.

Hugs, Pat

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        "Desiderata"

Martie
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9 posted 2003-05-01 04:57 PM


Hi there...with a vote!
Cpat Hair
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10 posted 2003-05-01 07:03 PM


thanks to all of you... kind of you to drop in and kind of you to vote for this...
I put it here on a whim..and in truth due to some attitude on my part... perhaps not the best attitude... like a lot of things we do in the spur of a moment we often question how sane we were when we did it... I'm questioning that more and more... LOL..

thanks again.


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11 posted 2003-05-01 07:07 PM


Voting for this.  I know that frustration.  Joyce

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (05-01-2003 07:07 PM).]

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