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Rick
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0 posted 2003-04-28 06:27 AM


Dancing on the music of a breeze to not return
Waving to the others all impatient for a turn
Riding breeze which cradled to a voice of lullaby
Sailing with the season and its final note goodbye

Then landing to a softness, which compelled a sense to sleep
Just laying there with others who all took their final leap
Then looking unto mother who just stood in naked awe
Before we slept the sleep of sleeps to part forevermore

[This message has been edited by Rick (04-28-2003 09:04 AM).]

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Lynda
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1 posted 2003-04-28 07:58 AM


A lovely, lovely poem Rick.  
No colours of Autumn, which is what I usually expect at this time in poems...which are the visual and what I get at school. This is a feeling and an action of Autumn - so different to what I have read before....well done Rick!

Lynda

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2 posted 2003-04-28 08:17 AM


Very cool Rick - loved it - voted.

He that trusteth in his own heart is a fool: but whoso walketh wisely, he shall be delivered. Proverbs 28:26

Rick
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3 posted 2003-04-28 09:01 AM


Dear Lynda, all that I could think about was the falling leaves, I know Autumn means colour, but it did not come into the picture that I could see, thanks for your wonderful comment, it was very much appreciated.

Poet4Christ, great to see you here, very pleased you enjoyed and voted, thank you.

To you both, again thank you, heart felt reponses.

Sincerely
Rick

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4 posted 2003-04-28 02:23 PM


Beautiful Rick. Gets my vote! Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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5 posted 2003-04-28 02:25 PM


Dancing on the music of a breeze to not return
Waving to the others all impatient for a turn
Riding breeze which cradled to a voice of lullaby
Sailing with the season and its final note goodbye

So pretty....The title caught my attention too cuz Autumn is my favorite season!!!!  LOVELY WRITE!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


Rick
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6 posted 2003-04-29 08:30 AM


Hi Chris, thanks for the great comment and the vote, very much appreciated.

Hi Bridgette, always lovely to have you visit, thanks for the reply and the comment.

To you both, thank you.

Sincerely
Rick

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7 posted 2003-04-29 01:59 PM


lovely
SPIRIT
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8 posted 2003-04-29 03:51 PM


My vote is in - lovely!
Rick
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9 posted 2003-04-30 07:43 AM


passing shadows, thanks for the reply, appreciated.

SPIRIT, great to see you here, thanks for the vote and the reply.

Sincerely
Rick

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Rick
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11 posted 2003-06-09 09:12 AM


Dear Dixie, another bump up, thank you.

Sincerely
Rick

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