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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2003-02-15 08:27 PM

Paint the sky with petals
of a thousand flowers
trace the star-cast shadows

that I could breathe again
upon     earth:

I fell into darkness
      into your amber midnights
your naked hope    laying beside
me

Whispers fell upon curves of
   the moon
soft yields in silence

echoing how winter feels
    when snow falls
gentle dancers

touching the world
   of my eyes

{you loved winter, the
     ice storms}

I sometimes failed
     to cross the silent
borders of your thoughts

I, the lover, counting
   anxious hours of loss--
veiled light, bronze   colors
glitter of unnamed stars

moving my   lips skyward

     {I am where I need to be}   an
angel between worlds  in endless water
pool of tender blue

             how my dreams arrive:

I fell for hours
    splashing into stars

I sing to life
To it's tragic beauty
To pain and strife
Let all that dances through me
The rise and the fall, I lived through it all

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (02-15-2003 08:33 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2003-02-15 08:34 PM

(smiles) Oh Lauren, this is sooooooooo beautifully breathtaking, sweet friend, yay, I just love the iagery in this of you falling and swimming through stars to find yourself only to fall on a dew-laden flowerbed! (kiss on cheek) I just love this, sweet friend, yay, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

2 posted 2003-02-15 09:12 PM

Greeneyes - how could this not be included...

BC

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

3 posted 2003-02-15 09:44 PM

Lauren, every poem of yours I've read is beautiful, and this is no exception.....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

4 posted 2003-02-15 09:56 PM

And a nod from the novice also,very nice.
Jason

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2003-02-15 10:11 PM

But of course...this one belongs.

RedTapePoetry
Junior Member

since 2003-02-02

Posts 19

6 posted 2003-02-16 02:02 AM

No contest. Wow.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2003-02-16 11:27 AM

Hi Lauren, this is a wonderful example of your work. It should be in the book!
Sandra

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

8 posted 2003-02-16 11:53 AM

A *fantastic* poem.

I especially like:

"I sometimes failed
to cross the silent
borders of your thoughts"

*s

[This message has been edited by Chanson (02-16-2003 11:57 AM).]

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

9 posted 2003-02-16 12:29 PM

I'm not sure even 'beautiful' describes this..it's more than that. It's exquisite!

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

10 posted 2003-02-17 12:21 PM

What PdV said... It's wonderful...

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

11 posted 2003-02-17 04:49 PM

'I am where I need to be', and this one needs to be in our new book...it is so lovely, and I love the flow!!

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy soul, and let the magik happen! ~~S~~

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

12 posted 2003-02-17 11:39 PM

Lauren,
I absolutely love this poem and your gorgeous new pic. I miss you so much. An awesome write as usual and it gets my vote.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Connel

Senior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

13 posted 2003-02-17 11:41 PM

This poe sounds like another poem i once read.. Thanks for sharing.

Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

14 posted 2003-02-18 02:08 AM

"   {I am where I need to be}   an
angel between worlds  in endless water
pool of tender blue

             how my dreams arrive:

I fell for hours
    splashing into stars"

I love this part! stunning write

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

15 posted 2003-02-18 04:16 AM

This is so very beautiful.. a must for the book.

Maree

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

16 posted 2003-02-18 07:26 AM

Your language and phrasing throughout is superb Lauren ... a wonderful choice for submission, very much enjoyed this.

Best wishes,
/Kit

winston
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 204
NW of Eden

17 posted 2003-02-18 07:50 AM

Greeneyes?

Well, I'll take your word for it.

Thanks.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

18 posted 2003-02-18 01:00 PM

When, poet of softness, will you come out with your own book? Very well done. Almost like reading a cloud.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

19 posted 2003-02-18 01:01 PM

Love the eroticism in your breaths of snow, here.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

20 posted 2003-02-18 01:28 PM

Your poetry matches your beautiful face!

May you continue to grace these pages with your graceful writing!

Linda

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

21 posted 2003-02-18 04:35 PM

This is breathtaking... especially the last two lines, that left me in a state of amazement, hungry for more, so I read this two or three more times.

I really, really like this poem. You must have somehow stood right there in that moment you captured and written it all on your invisible notepad with your invisible pen, 'cause I can't imagine how your memory could bring that moment back so clearly.

Just amazing. This earns my vote.

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

22 posted 2003-02-18 04:38 PM

beautifully penned......love it

Charisma

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

23 posted 2003-02-18 10:05 PM

you already know how much I adore this poem...and the poet

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ... it then directs your course."

K.Gibran

angsana
Member

since 2002-11-11

Posts 77

24 posted 2003-02-19 01:00 AM

Another masterpiece I've read!! Loved this:
"I sometimes failed
to cross the silent
borders of your thoughts"

angsana

christian
Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 331

25 posted 2003-02-19 01:03 AM

everything you write is gorgeous. forget
the anthology, publish your own book.

thanks for being such an inspiration.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

26 posted 2003-02-19 06:37 AM

{I am where I need to be}

~*~

Yes, and we are so fortunate that you are!

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

27 posted 2003-02-19 09:32 AM

Anything of yours I would vote for.. It wouldn't be a complete book of poetry from this site if it didn't have your beautiful poems inside.

Tara

jbouder
Member Elite

since 1999-09-18

Posts 2534
Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash

28 posted 2003-02-19 10:26 AM

Very well done.

Jim

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

29 posted 2003-02-19 10:55 AM

Beautiful...
Hugs2uPoetFriend
*~coco~*

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

30 posted 2003-02-19 05:47 PM

Simply gorgeous, Lauren.
I love this.
Hugs,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

31 posted 2003-02-20 01:21 AM

You always write like a multi-faceted diamond and here is another gem (love the new pictures too by the way). Off to vote now.

~* Carpe' Diem *~

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

32 posted 2003-02-20 12:41 PM

I fell for hours
splashing into stars
........

WOW...

Your writing skills are exquisite; so is this poem...

regards,
sudhir

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

33 posted 2003-02-20 03:23 PM

Lauren, this is a perfect representation of your poetry and a beauty too.

~* Carpe' Diem *~

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

34 posted 2003-02-20 05:07 PM

"I fell for hours
splashing into stars"
Such a serene ending to this one

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

35 posted 2003-02-21 11:34 PM

I don't know what to say but, BEAUTIFUL!!!!!

Bridgette

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

36 posted 2003-02-21 11:40 PM

I haven't the proper words to tell you how great a piece this is

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

37 posted 2003-02-27 02:23 PM

Great!

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

38 posted 2003-02-27 05:42 PM

Thank you all for the heart warming replies, and support....I appreciate every one, and every word....

MUWWWAAHHHSSS AND HUGSSSSSSSS

PEACE

Lauren~

Take me where the tides start
So I can pull you into me

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

39 posted 2003-02-27 07:08 PM

enjoyed

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

40 posted 2003-03-28 08:57 PM

hiya Greeneyes, well I must compliment you on this precious gem that I must thread into my library as I failed2do so b4...
Hugs2uPoetFriend...
*~coco~*

[This message has been edited by CocoBaci (03-29-2003 08:34 AM).]

waldopepper
Member

since 2003-03-18

Posts 157
Tennessee, USA

41 posted 2003-03-28 09:55 PM

Intensely intimate and powerful words my friend. The not so subtle imagery belies the ardent nature of the message. Wonderful.

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

42 posted 2003-03-31 12:07 PM

Lauren~ You have such a tender way with your words. As always enjoyed very much...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

KristieSue

Senior Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

43 posted 2003-03-31 10:49 AM

*sigh* :-)

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

44 posted 2003-06-10 07:09 AM

'you loved the winters, the ice storms'.
billiant line, i love the winter too.you paint your world perfectly, who would not wnt to spend the winter with you, with such writng? thank you ..rose.

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

45 posted 2003-06-11 01:13 AM

*Time Will Get You Through*

There is a time to go away
There is a time to sit and
Play go onto the time to
Cling to the memories of
Forgotten years

Even though the late
Nights of thinking
And sorting through
Forget the things that
Has been done to u

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

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