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ThunderMage
Senior Member

since 2002-06-20

Posts 812
Canada

0 posted 2003-04-19 04:20 AM

Deep within the darkest reaches,
It has begun.
Far across our familiar world,
A battle won.

The deepest depths of the sea,
The oceans so vast.
So many look to the future,
More still to the past.

How many look at today,
At what they can change?
Is it really all that hard?
Is that power so strange?

Have I truly found Heaven on Earth?
Why's it so dark?
Or is this the inferno of Hades?
Where to carve my mark...?

This darkness embraces me,
Fills me with power,
Makes every second of might
Seem like an hour.

It feels so empty and cold,
Yet strangely like home.
I've ventured too far to return,
So I must roam.

But what awaits me now?
What fate lies ahead?
Will I find a new life?
Will we all be dead?

I turn the corners slowly.
Wait! That sound!
That low rumbling noise.
It's under the ground!

The beast erupts as though
From within a volcano;
Fire and ash everywhere,
A living inferno!

Death has claimed another,
It's he and I.
One-on-one I face him,
And I refuse to die!

What is life without poetry and adventure?
"Little sister" is just another way of saying "Guardian Angel"!
We do not stop playing because we grow ol

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2003-04-19 07:45 PM

Good for you. Keep battling. Joyce

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

2 posted 2003-04-20 04:07 AM

I certainly hope this gets into the book! You've crafted a wonderful and fantastic exploration of our human gift of free will. I am puzzled by your fascinating use of darkness and heaven in your poem. I'll be storing this to my library and reviewing it later on.

2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
--Smit
My Creations

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

3 posted 2003-04-20 11:13 AM

Hey, I actually really like this... is it about Chrono Trigger? The whole discussion of time and a beast that erupts like a volcano kind of made me think of CT. Even if that's not what you had in mind, it's still a very cool poem... you wrote this well, I'd like to see more work from you of this quality.

Parasite

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-04-20 01:51 PM

I like the action and adventure aspect of it. It is like he will battle to the end. I love it.

Cold hands means a warm heart

ThunderMage
Senior Member

since 2002-06-20

Posts 812
Canada

5 posted 2003-04-20 02:43 PM

I've never played CT, so I couldn't have written about it deliberately. LOL. It's more to do with the inner struggles and other things faced in life.

What is life without poetry and adventure?
"Little sister" is just another way of saying "Guardian Angel"!
We do not stop playing because we grow ol

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2003-04-21 04:15 AM

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

7 posted 2003-04-21 01:37 PM

this really held my attention

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

8 posted 2003-04-21 01:46 PM

You kept me wondering all the way to the end....exciting write!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Verve
Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 348
Singapore

9 posted 2003-04-23 07:32 AM

Nice!

Cheers!

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