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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Insanity By Peter J Marcroft I lie alone, counting the soft white bricks of my cell, Watching all areas, I keep hold of my power, Contrary to belief, inside here is not a hell, More like a room, where forbidden thoughts flower. What I was is nothing more than a distant past, Before my mind played tricks and I saw them all, Sanity fades, like life it cannot last, So I readied myself, to answer their call. Then fame found me, and I was adored by men in white, How was I to know their interest was shallow? Just as I began to think that my star shone bright, I got abandoned here, like a field left fallow. Yet I am safe here, while the world sells its soul To greedy corporations, and surrender to conformity, I smile as I rot away, down in my hole, While the world out there, is reduced to lunacy. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Oh Peter, it is very horrifying, I don't understand too how the world wants everyone to be uniform, and surrender what makes us unique, when that only makes us seem like a versimilitude of what God wanted us to be! (sad sigh) Then people just keep merging until finally there is no reason to go on and things seem so obfuscating, you touch on this real insanity ever so well, this is a poignant and great read, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Peter, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thanks for reading and I am glad that you liked this piece, I enjoyed writing this many months ago too |
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dhicks03 Member
since 2002-12-26
Posts 267Missouri,USA |
Very good! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Excellent! |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
I am flattered that you people like this piece, thank you |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Peter, the title reached out and grabbed me, as I think most artistic people are a bit on the insane side!! I love the way you opened up the darker side of human nature, and presented it for thought. Life isn't always roses and sunshine....great write. Accept these small gifts from my gypsy soul, and let the magik happen! ~~S~~ |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thank you very much for the feedback, yes a life of roses this ain't and people should acknowledge that |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Life's a real bugger, isn't it? I think this is more skillfully written than your other, Peter. This one should definitely see the pages of Reflections; my vote is cast. Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Every coin does have its dark side and you have illustrated that very well. Those who know me, wonder how I manage to stay more on the bright side, when I have experienced more trials and tribulations in this lifetime, than many will experience in several! I suppose the answer for me is simple--light banishes the dark and brings joy back into my life. Happy begets happy!--and the converse is also true! At difficult and tragic times, my writing has been dark, but that is not a place where I would like to dwell. Those poems provide a release of any brooding negativity that may be held deep inside me, but once those feelings are gone, I welcome the sun back into my days! I appreciate your openness and your fine writing of the darker days which we all experience from time to time. Warm hugs to warm up those days of night, EA |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
powerful write.....! enjoyed hugs, g |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This one makes one stop and think....where I work I see a few hundred people a day and often think they're all crazy....that little room sounds nice. Good stuff!!! The votes in!!!! Bridgette |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thanks all for the votes and the feedback, I appreciate everyone who has read my work, it makes me feel honoured that people give up some of their time to read my stuff [This message has been edited by Peter J Marcroft (02-20-2003 05:15 PM).] |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Just a bump back up.... |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
"...More like a room, where forbidden thoughts flower. Sanity fades, like life it cannot last, So I readied myself, to answer their call. Then fame found me, and I was adored by men in white, How was I to know their interest was shallow?..." Excellent lines and a pointed question. Enjoyed! *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Glad you enjoyed the piece, I certainly enjoyed writing it. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
It's all in the point of view and I'm crazy enough to like it. Joyce |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Peter - many thoughts about inside one's self I read here, well done, and my vote... BC |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A very interesting write, one I can understand and relate to on many levels. It's a very well written piece! |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thanks to all of you who have read and enjoyed this piece, I don't need to explain it any further as you have all figured it out, but I am glad you read, you responded or you voted. Without you all, the poetry is meaningless |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Such an interesting write, glad I was browsing around and found it. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Peter, this is a very strong and interesting poem. I vote for it to get in the book. Ethel |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You certainly opened up the dark side of humanity, and did it in an excellent write. Well done indeed. |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
I thank you all for the positive feedback, it is an honour to recieve such praise |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Contrary to belief, inside here is not a hell, More like a room, where forbidden thoughts flower. Dark thoughts wonderfully expressed. Very nicely done! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
A very different poem than what I've read thus far, but one with much truth in it. Great job! |
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