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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I had to lift the gate to enter-- it dragged ragged on the ground held by half a screw on hinge-- the rot of wood made not a sound as I held the door aloft amazed there was no hindrance there. I turned and placed it with much thought imagining a coat of care. I saw a winding path ahead overgrown with four-o-clocks the bricks were moldy in thier bed parslane held hands--interlocked Egyptian sage grew wild in bloom Hawaiian ginger boasted soon rule of garden in perfume... behold the braid of bud's cocoon. Butterflies in kiss of me-- dance to bass of bumblebee. I spied a sundial in the weeds the ancient brought me to my knees pulling grass by the handful wishing sun would shadow dial... I pulled the last grasp of the grass and then the sun burst through in smile. He played upon a wing of time casting shadow in the rust silent darkness rang the chime-- and I, the ash, returned to dust. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - pointed finger, words seen writing in the sky... BC |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Yay!!! Oh my gosh, your gorgeous words are always blooming with such splendid imagery, sweet friend, you truly have the most addictive graphics and that is what always makes your poetry seem like a secret garden, complete with ponds and lights, yay, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity~ Give me one good reason why I shouldn't vote for this lovely poem...Paul And time stood still for awhile With suns glow to my face it brought a smile When shadow was cast upon ancient sundial "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
this is beautiful...one of the best things i have seen you write...h |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Karen~ This is truly beautiful and definitely one of my favorites of yours. You never cease to amaze me with your talent. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, I don't think I read this before, but like the others, this is definitely my favorite of yours, or at least one of them...   [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-17-2003 07:49 PM).] |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Makes my heart swell to read this knowing I can vote for it to be in the book!  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I smell summer dust.... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Knowing how you love gardening and flowers I am not surprised that this is what you submitted - and it pleases us all  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh I remember this beauty...Perfect for Reflections! |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Wonderful imagery, Karen. I enjoyed this.  --Elizabeth You can sit there and forgive someone until the cows come home, and it won't make a bit of difference until they forgive themselves. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity--this, you...beautiful! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Damn, this is fantstic! Great to read your wonderful writing again. Sandra |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A beauty, witch! Ed |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A wonderful write, Karen... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
yes |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
love where this took me |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I loved your thoughts in this, Karen ... an excellent write, indeed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
Your work's always breathtaking. Can't wait to see it in a book! This book, to be precise. remember the sound |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Enjoyed this walk very much. Check!!!! -Bob |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
For me personally, this is Serenity Blaze at her finest! May your garden be forever in bloom, Linda |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
May this be in the book, where its shadows and ghostly ringing may impart the whole book with a sense of otherworldly weight. Oh, and thier should be their. Love ya, Sen. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
yes, yes, yes... loved it, O serene one ... r u listening?  regards, sudhir |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is absolutely beautiful...I'm struck by the final stanza |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Serenity, you have no bounds on the wonders that you put to pen..very gentle smile |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Geez! I got this one, though. All things artificial and man-made laying rusted and broken, but the natural world of the garden inside cannot rust. So it was necessary that you come to a state of peace with nature, that you feel the grass and greet the sun, before returning to dust. I'm not sure if you mean to say that you return to nature, or you are rejected by nature and turn to dust as you were an ash, which matches the desolate, "rusted" imagery you attributed to the world of man... Real head-scratcher, but your talent is solid and you write with a skill I can only dream of someday developing. It'd be a tragedy not to include this in Reflections. Parasite "Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Hey s b, It is "their" not "thier". Want it in the book just right. So it gets my vote. Cool write! If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Butterflies in kiss of me-- dance to bass of bumblebee. I spied a sundial in the weeds the ancient brought me to my knees pulling grass by the handful wishing sun would shadow dial... I pulled the last grasp of the grass and then the sun burst through in smile. He played upon a wing of time casting shadow in the rust silent darkness rang the chime-- and I, the ash, returned to dust. ======================================= what would a passions book be with out your rhymes divine. " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
As always dearFriend it's a great pleasure to read your poetry... This is a gem of a read... Hugs2uAlways *~coco~* |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
THIS just HAS to be in the book!!! This is you at your very best Karen! ~Hugs and a vote!~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Maybe I should give up trying?  Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is just awesome!! Love it!! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks for the "catch" Mikie... um...gonna have to get a moderator to fix that for me. I was correcting a noun/verb disagreement at the time I posted--it's always something ain't it? and thanks to all of course.... with much love. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Do I remember this or am I working with damaged brain cells again?? Either way...it rocks K! |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Karen, this is an awesome piece of writing! Fantastic! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Don't know how i missed this K, gorgeous write [This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-23-2003 07:47 PM).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I may not be able to write one but I know a good poem when I see it. Wish I ould vote twice. Joyce |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Forgive me, I'm in awe.  |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Ah, witch You should be thinking about a book of yer own. ~yeti |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Serenity, Beautifully written, really enjoyed. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
That's IT - I give UP. Okay, I'm too stubborn for that, but thank goodness I have someone like you to read and be inspired by. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi Gorgeous! Just coming in for another read. This is my absolute favourite of yours. I am in awe with a big smile on my face. I wish I could vote again and again and again Maree. [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (03-10-2003 03:25 PM).] |
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Flower Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 240California |
Beautiful it is! Love reading all these great writes. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
If you think I'm not voting for this one...you're NUTS!! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K - this hurts: He played upon a wing of time casting shadow in the rust silent darkness rang the chime-- and I, the ash, returned to dust. but is lovely - you are just . . . you xxoo good luck |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Doing the birthday bump from me library of rhyme divine Sen keepers. Its your day..the forums shall be your marquee |
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