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Rex Allen McCoy
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0 posted 2003-03-27 04:09 PM



He should Feel what I Feel
~~~

Standing by the window one morning blankly staring down the lane
Deep in ponder ... waking up
Fresh brewed coffee ... steaming hot
When suddenly I saw it
but through the rain my vision wasn't clear

So with eyes blinking ... I stepped closer
and wiped condensation from the pane

A nose pressed to the cold damp glass brought a shocking apparition from the past
It struck an arrow through my heart with ghostly pain

Coffee splashed upon the floor as I hastened toward the door
the pound of clapping thunder in my chest

Fumbling blindly at the lock slid it back and turned the knob
Raw desperation put sagging hinges to the test

Racing frantic through the rain wildly screaming out her name
tires spun as drunken driver sped away

There I sobbed ... upon the ground
hands gripping mud and nearly drowned

Naught before me but a memory ...
gone insane
~~~

[This message has been edited by Rex Allen McCoy (03-27-2003 04:12 PM).]

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Pilgrimage
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1 posted 2003-03-27 04:14 PM


This was emotional dynamite. Scary in the extreme.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-03-27 04:17 PM


I remember...
good choice...
very very good choice...
A Must for Reflections...

[Note to Sunshine: I need to speak to Ron
about being able to vote more than once!]

        Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

christian
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3 posted 2003-03-27 04:19 PM



nice images, nice concept, nice poem in
general. nice.

Enchantress
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4 posted 2003-03-27 06:14 PM


Very well done Rex...good choice.
Gets my vote!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

dgvarner
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5 posted 2003-03-27 06:32 PM


wow..that was very emotional..i was right there with you while reading..great writing!

hugs, g

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Earth Angel
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6 posted 2003-03-27 08:03 PM


...well I felt what YOU were feeling!

A very compelling write!

Peace & Light,
Earth Angel

garysgirl
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7 posted 2003-03-27 08:49 PM


Goodness, this felt like I had my nose
pressed against the window pane. And, I
was seeing the scene just as you wrote
it. I even read it over again to see if
I felt the same....I did.
I really hope this gets in the book.

Hugs,
Ethel

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8 posted 2003-03-27 11:44 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Rex, I felt everything in your emotional write, dearest friend, this made me tear up reading your compelling response and I am glad it is all just a memory now! (sad sigh) I send extra special angel hugs your way, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Rex, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

waldopepper
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9 posted 2003-03-28 12:12 PM


Complex and compelling and very good stuff!  Got my vote.
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10 posted 2003-03-28 12:30 PM


Rex,

Very powerful full of gripping the seat emotion from beginning to end.

                                 Dawn

Justbleu
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11 posted 2003-03-28 10:25 AM


This has my vote.....Intense write!!!!
Bridgette

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Chelsea
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12 posted 2003-03-28 10:46 AM


wow I was with you the whole way..very intense and emotional...great write, got my vote!
Nan
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13 posted 2003-03-28 11:17 AM


Words for ponderance and certainly for "Reflections"...
Flower
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14 posted 2003-03-28 11:50 AM


I really felt this one. I voted most certainly.
catalinamoon
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15 posted 2003-03-28 09:53 PM


Rex, this is powerful writing.
Sandra

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16 posted 2003-03-28 09:56 PM


I remember too ~~ Loved it then, love it now.  Great write Rex, holds the reader from first to last.  Bonnie
hoot_owl_rn
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17 posted 2003-03-28 10:06 PM



Alicethruglass
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18 posted 2003-03-29 04:32 PM


very sad but  written so well...
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19 posted 2003-03-29 05:06 PM


I knew when I saw your name that I was in for a treat and I was not disappointed.  Joyce
sweetwater
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20 posted 2003-03-30 09:58 AM


we need a smilie with big eyes. Not so much the 'eek' one but something that says, 'this was so powerful I am speechless'
Paul Wilson
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21 posted 2003-03-30 11:54 PM


Rex...You sure hit a soft spot in my heart with this emotional poem. Thanks for sharing...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

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