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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Blue Tones She’s singing in a voice that tastes of Johnny Walker Black. The tenor sax starts pledging love, and then gets lost in scat. How can she sing this ache I feel and make it come out sweet? How can a trumpet generate this sweaty body heat? Somewhere up front a drunk calls out, he wants another beer; there’s playful shrieks and giggles from a table in the rear. But I don’t mind the crowd at all, or smell the drifting smoke, the cigarettes and cheap perfume so thick you almost choke. I’m caught up in the voice, the horns, my world is drenched in sound. There’s nothing but blue tones and me when jazz comes raining down. Nan (Pilgrim variety) [This message has been edited by Pilgrimage (03-27-2003 04:28 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Let me be the first to "click" once you mark this for book submission... Surely...others will follow... because it's downright fine! E-mail me when it's fixed - and I'll be back! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, MUCH better! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Having worked in radio for 15 years, most of it jazz formated, I'm hip to the feel of your words. Thanks for sharing. Voting. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well, my ears prefer blues. *S* But my eyes are quite happy with these blue tones... you brought the club and the music to life. *S* Beautiful write! *S* |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Yay! Oh Nancy, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I find it magical when music seems to recognize exactly how we feel and the melody gets us dancing, to me Latin music does that the most of all! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, you have my 12-bar blues vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I love the rhythm and rhyme of this jazzy poem. Perfect book submission....my vote.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I thoroughly enjoyed this the first time that I read it, but I think I enjoyed it even more this time around!  Warm hugs, EA |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
OH YES!!! Perfect for the book! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nan, this is superb! Not only are the words exceptional but the construction and the pace your words set are in perfect tune with the theme. Bravo, dear miss!!  |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Well Nan, I know nothing of the environment. But I love jazz almost as much as I love this poem. (Jazz is my favorite music!) Awesome write. This has to be in the book. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She’s singing in a voice that tastes of Johnny Walker Black. The tenor sax starts pledging love, and then gets lost in scat. How can she sing this ache I feel and make it come out sweet? How can a trumpet generate this sweaty body heat? =========================== I ditto what Deer said..this is superb word play on theme and was a melodic treat to read aloud... That second verse is a sultry gem of pen!! very cool poem of imagery and inspire. Well done poetess!! take your encore bow  "and when we get to the pearly gates ... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Karilea, I swear I clicked the book thingy the first time. I must have clumsy fingers. Thank you so much for letting me know right away, so I could fix it. Andrew, I take you for the expert, so if you say it works, I know it works. Thanks. Suthern girl, Thank You! I wanted to set the mood, and bring it home. Noah, you're always so kind, thanks! Ethel, thanks for your jazzy reply. EA, I'm glad you came back for another look. I smoothed it up some before reposting it, and I hope it helped. Enchantress-hugs right back at ya! Balladeer- I had to do a bit of rewrite to get the meter but I'm glad I did, since it earned your 'Bravo' ! Larry C-isn't jazz grand? Janet Marie, thank you so much for such kind words. I've a big grin on my face. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Nan darling heart sometimes I lose my way to the light and seem to wander in darkness for an eternity. But when I do, and of late I really do, I know that your words will shine the light that signals the way home. Thank you for this delightful gem darling one it is utterly utterly wonderful. I will try to come in more often, its just right now it is really difficult, sometimes a pain is better not shared, it simply hurts too much. But be assured that when I do find my way here it is your work I’ll cling. This is truly wonderful darling one, and gets my vote, and if I could give it multiple one I would, I truly would, the book wouldn’t really be worth its paper if you weren’t included in it This is exquisite writing, I knew it would be because YOU wrote it.  Love and warm stuff as always Mushy Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Enjoyed the read very much... Smiles2uPoetFriend... *~coco~* |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Bravo!! I could smell the smoke, feel the body heat and the ambiance of the bar. GREAT job!  |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
So, Marsha, I guess that means you like it? You must know I'd be awfully disappointed if you didn't. You can come by just to talk you know. coco- hugsPoet DeVine-what a divine thing to say. I was trying to get it down so you'd see and feel it. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
What a great poem! Perfect in the story line. It also hits a note in me regarding jazz. Needles to say, this poem bleongs in the book. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Pilgrimage~ You took the notes and strung them poetically perfect~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What a lovely tune this one plays out  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Nan, This is wonderful imagery. Put me right there and I could hear it as well. Enjoyed greatly. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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pjtalty Member
since 2002-07-17
Posts 111W.A., Australia |
Oh Yeah! Your skill as a painter of images that leap out and pull one willingly into that atmosphere is magical! As a muso myself and a jazz lover who has been there many times, you certainly brought memories alive with this gem! Thanks for the feeling! I look forward to seeing it in the anthology. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Thanks, Long John, isn't jazz grand? Marge, *hugs* to you. Hoot-thanks! Dear Regards2you, I appreciate that-I worked hard on the images. pj-I'm glad I struck a note with you! Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I enjoyed this greatly. Sandra |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
Wow,Nancy,I love stories that transport you.You made me think of the "Blue Note" up in NYC and other jazz clubs I've been to.You write so eloquently and concise.There is a saying,"Always leave'em wanting more.",and you did so.Sometimes certain poems can be a bit too long and possibly lose your attention along the way.This offering makes one want to read it several times over just to savour it.Very nice.and you have my vote.Hope it makes it in the book. Peace On Earth,Street Heart If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living. |
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ShadowLost Junior Member
since 2001-06-23
Posts 43 |
I'm not familar with jazz music but, I really enjoyed this poem!!! Thanks!!!! Bridgette  ...and now these three things remain: faith, hope and love. But, the greatest of these is love. 1 Corinthians 13.13 |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Sandra-I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. I'm pleased with the way it turned out. Street Heart-How very nice of you! I tried to get the feel of jazz in this, and I'm so pleased it worked for you. Bridgitte-You have a treat in store! There's all kinds of jazz, from the kind that makes you get up and move to the kind that makes you sit and cry, and everything in between. I recommend you listen to some and see what style you like. You'll have to like one of them. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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