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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Take #2 I would have come sooner had I known; yet the gimly eyed goblins of communication let me down again- They did not pass by my sty where my wallow of guilt consumes the songs of you they did not peer through my broken windows where the splinters of disappointment embedded from our union have corrupted my vision I have come, knowing the maggots of silence will have eaten our love I view the pristine marble of your countenance untouched by pain or life and sigh in regret for lost promises in shattered dreams You lie still and cold much as you were within life and the wallow of grief shreds my soul To touch you once again is my vision and my prayer; yet, did I ever touch you? The distance of our fears became the shroud of indifference long before this point in time and now it is too late - eternal silence fills me as the corruption of our love is finalised - I would have come sooner had I known. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes Kethry....one for the book for sure! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Wow! My vote. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Kethry, this is so very heartaching, sweet friend, I send many angel hugs your way and hope the distance can be compromised or you can find through the miles what you are looking for! (sad sigh) This has my vote, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Yes, definately a beautiful poem and a marvelous addition to the book Dawn |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
A big vote for this one. Joyce [This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (03-14-2003 04:31 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I have come, knowing the maggots of silence will have eaten our love only you could decribe it this way and get away with it  hugssss M |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I would have come sooner, but I was drunk on maggot wine. Silly Kethry, this is bookish. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling with you... for doing a good job... quote: |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, Kethry...my vote  "Love makes the world go around" |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
They did not pass by my sty where my wallow of guilt consumes the songs of you they did not peer through my broken windows where the splinters of disappointment embedded from our union have corrupted my vision Wow, is all I can say. Incredible, it gets my vote.  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Never thought I'd read the word maggot in a love poem! I really enjoyed this Keth. You did a great job. Voting!  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ditto Sharon - maggot!  but lady you take a work and squeeze all the juice out of it to suit you that is for sure  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Lynne.... this.. I have come, knowing the maggots of silence will have eaten our love Excellent imagery, the whole poem too. Voting Maree |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Very nice! my vote. Jason |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
"They did not pass by my sty where my wallow of guilt consumes the songs of you they did not peer through my broken windows where the splinters of disappointment embedded from our union have corrupted my vision" Songs of you...splinters of disappointment-- Love that especially! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved one and painter of a soul’s inner beauty once more your writing is simply stunning. I can't recall what I wrote the first time but you always have my vote, and if I could I'd stuff the ballot box. Not that you need such trickery your writing is always superb, and this is splendiferous Keth weaves a web and I see the grace Woven throughout a special trace The lightest touch of gossamer breeze Of words that flutter through to tease And in the wonder I see the way The words and rhythm interplay She leaves the thought hanging free Waiting for the reader to just see How the thought is threaded here Over and under the dreamers tear And when the piece is ready to show She leaves within it a special glow This is why her writings always shine Keth beloved you are so divine Yes I love it utterly Love you always And forever Slushy   Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds but I can face the future with courage brave and bold Footprints In My Heart Kethry [This message has been edited by Marsha (03-16-2003 08:54 PM).] |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
You write very powerfully, Kethry.  Elizabeth It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got... |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Kethry~Very profound words that touches the soul.Enjoyed very much...Paul To touch you once again is my vision and my prayer; yet, did I ever touch you? "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I like the edge and the spin you put on it! Great write! Springtime hugs, EA |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this voice suits you my friend. . . I like it. . . well done. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I welcome the chance to vote for this one again... we'll let Artemis and Ron figure out what's lost and what's not. *S* This is superb, Keth... such an excellent portrait of the regrets too many of us know. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
as always a treat to read you Kethry ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Getting my vote dear Aussi lady. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
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waldopepper Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 157Tennessee, USA |
"The distance of our fears became the shroud of indifference long before this point in time" How sad and ironic that many do take for granted the love around them, until it becomes too late. It is a most painful lesson to learn. I enjoyed this powerful poem very much my friend. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Keth it is one for the book, it just has to go in there is no question about it. I really really do love it. Very well written  love and warm stuff as always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Kethry, stunning write, that left me deep in thought. as always your work is nothing short of remarkable! i wanted to tell you had i seen this sooner, you'd have had my vote. so instead congrats on making the book! you deserve it! take care amy "love is like a butterfly-- |
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Bohemianaus Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 69Australia (South Gippsland) |
Hi Lynne - i love it. Boh God bless and keep you, Namaste! |
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