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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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There were flames in the sky the weather was off even July can be cold -- {we were use to hearing the trains; their horns echoing the town} its all so tangled In the morning you wake from languid nights pockets full of shells, shifting sand through fingers rubbing, at the same time, stones He left flowers in my name; orchids, white and full of dew as if a smile could change the mountains we have left to embark upon the canvas, the work of art-- {laughing} blue eludes white on white only the rain can make me feel this way I close my eyes shadows of color spread the deafness on the vibrant dance floor I say this because: my knees have need for-- connection of human warmth In all this time I have learned the elegance of life, from the shore you can see the swells of the rising tides The moon is up now the water will sleep the wind will whisper the telling signs I stand, still, at the window we are between midnight and darkness waiting sky is that moment Take me where the tides start |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Greeneyes Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Yay! Oh Lauren, don't worry, Ron has Artemis all under control this time! (kiss on cheek) I'm so happy to read this again so I can place my vote again for you, may the horizon always bask in gold and pink and blue for you, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
In all this time I have learned the elegance of life, from the shore you can see the swells of the rising tides The moon is up now the water will sleep the wind will whisper the telling signs I stand, still, at the window we are between midnight and darkness waiting sky is that moment damn you anyway... for being so good.. LOL pardon me while my little green moster throws a fit knowing it will never write like this...and so wishes it could... my vote... and not done in an begrudging way... LOL |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Thought this was excellent before, and my opinion hasn't changed. Strong poem, Lauren. Thanks for the read. Jim |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So beautiful sweetie! ~hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Poetry doesn't get much prettier than this.  The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
OOPS, forgot to vote. LOLThe stars will shine when I am gone, |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Rain showers and good poetry, yes..I like. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, Lauren, very good poetry...  Hugs, Ethel |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Very strong and powerful.  Elizabeth It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got... |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Very pretty posting. Joyce |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I stand, still, at the window we are between midnight and darkness waiting Whoa was this ever a "Greeneyes" original! Loved it! |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Muwwwaaahhhsss and HUGSSSSSSSSSS thanks for the heartfelt comments...I appreciate you taking yourtime to read...  Lauren~ Take me where the tides start So I can pull you into me [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-13-2003 12:13 AM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - you amaze me with your talent... BC |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Lovely - absolutely lovely. Gets my vote. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, You never cease to amaze me! Excellent write and here's my vote. BTW, "we were use to hearing the trains", use should be used. I'll always love your writing.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Ah geez. You do this, so very well. |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Lauren, This is another beautiful poem you have given us. Dawn |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
In all this time I have learned the elegance of life, from the shore you can see the swells of the rising tides Picking a favorite part is almost impossible... for from the title through the end, this is eloquent perfection. *S* |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
The stars will shine when I am gone, the earth will turn on as before, the gulls, still race along the shore, the morning star, still kiss the dawn Beautiful.. SG |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
between midnight and darkness waiting sky is that moment ...this is one of my favorites of yours |
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dhicks03 Member
since 2002-12-26
Posts 267Missouri,USA |
Wow, very nice. Just one auestion, then I'll vote. Are your eyes really green ? |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Muwwwaaahhhssss and HUGSSSSSSSS love to all....thank you for reading and for your support.... Dhicks03-YES my eyes are as green as they come..... allLauren~ Here I am Running after dreams ~ I made it through another lonely night Thinking of you I know I should be strong I just can’t say ~goodbye~(LR) [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-15-2003 03:14 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
came back to vote again for this gem of pen...its got to be in MY book  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lovely work, Lauren. All writing comes |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Very beautiful.Enjoyed this much. Jason |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Muwwwaaahhhsss and hugssss love you all....Peace L~ I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Voting here |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I seem to recall voting for this before. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 The Sun The Moon The Stars The Sky |
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sweetwater Member
since 2002-12-16
Posts 178Perth |
I agree with this comment "Poetry doesn't get much prettier than this"  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Lovely poem.... Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
it is all so tangled, yes... My, but you do have a way of weaving through the darkness and bringing it to light. and it is oh so lovely Lauren~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
He left flowers in my name; orchids, white and full of dew as if a smile could change the mountains we have left to embark upon the canvas, the work of art-- {laughing} blue eludes white on white only the rain can make me feel this way ****************** Amazing would only tickle the embrace of compliments these words deserve but please accept it as my way of showing appreciation for your always defining words. ****************** The moon is up now the water will sleep the wind will whisper the telling signs I stand, still, at the window we are between midnight and darkness waiting sky is that moment **************** These moments I have felt many times and never knew how to pen them properly. You have done so in grand style. Take a bow knowing you have reached that level most of us only dream of. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Just wanted you to know that yessssss ... I DID vote for this one. Forgot to tell you in last reply. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful!! Charisma |
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