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pjtalty
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since 2002-07-17

Posts 111
W.A., Australia

0 posted 2003-03-12 04:05 AM

He cried at her cruelty;
her duplicity; her failure
to treat reality with honesty,
but the tears, waves of them
were not crystal pure.

They were dangerous, were charged
with currents of hurt; deep distress;
rushing like raging torrents
flooding reason, drowning will
to rise above the deluge.

The gait that used to happily swing
in joyous rhythms of life became
a shamble of shuffles descending
into deep chasms of bitterness:
now his alter ego.

Thirty years struggled to pass;
the constant pain, the aching thirst
for vengeance never passed; disdain
for love had soured a spirit now
in a kind of death

Poor fellow! What can be done?
What can friends do for him?
What can life do for him?
What can he do for life?
Can he live again?

Pity! Only he can rise
from his grave of deathly sadness
to cull the weeds of bitterness,
to forgive and then to live again
with hope, happiness, renewal.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2003-03-12 09:11 AM

Very well done!

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2003-03-12 09:13 AM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Patrick, this is so very heartfelt and ever so common between us all, sweet friend, sadly I know this feeling too and I know by experience only oneself can rise above and seek forgiveness! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs to you for this sensitive and touching write, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patrick, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

KristieSue

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since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

3 posted 2003-03-12 10:12 AM

sad, but well written...

KS

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2003-03-12 10:59 AM

pjtalty
Good one, enjoyed.

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-03-12 03:08 PM

Patrick, this is a very well-written
poem.

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

6 posted 2003-03-19 12:10 PM

I agree, this is a really well written poem.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

7 posted 2003-03-19 02:22 PM

Your closing stanza summed up the poem very well.

Peace & Light,
Earth Angel

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

8 posted 2003-03-24 06:26 PM

an angst ridden ride--well done

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

SPIRIT
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since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

9 posted 2003-03-25 01:07 AM

Enormously vote worthy piece.

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

10 posted 2003-03-25 03:33 PM

so sad, but only he can clear his own mind. Joyce

Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

11 posted 2003-03-25 04:09 PM

Very, very nice write.
Jason

Street Heart
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since 2002-09-05

Posts 349
Pennsylvania,USA

12 posted 2003-04-05 02:27 PM

Good Lord,Patrick,do you know me? If not,you must be psychic! You have no idea how much I am there within your work.I bet we could talk volumes together,you and I.You have written such an eloquently insightful free
verse here.A "keeper" for me and you have my vote.If this is autobiographical,I sincerely hope that you find some type of healing.Man,
I'm telling you...your references to duplicity,bitterness,and so on...goodness,
if you only knew.The effects of betrayal and abandonment can last forever.I am not telling you this to have you reply,but read my offering in the "Corner Pub" called
"9/11/2000".That is what happened to me as the "jet" of betrayal crashed into the "tower" of my belief,trust,life.Still healing and trying to turn disaster into good.Wishing you better days and better Love.

Peace On Earth,Geoffrey

If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living.

Martin Luther King,Jr. Detroit,1963

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

13 posted 2003-04-29 11:28 PM

enjoyed -- great ending!

hugs, g

"If you suppress laughter, it goes down and spreads out your hips."- Steve Allen

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