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POEM: A Kind Of Death. |
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pjtalty Member
since 2002-07-17
Posts 111W.A., Australia 
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He cried at her cruelty; her duplicity; her failure to treat reality with honesty, but the tears, waves of them were not crystal pure. They were dangerous, were charged with currents of hurt; deep distress; rushing like raging torrents flooding reason, drowning will to rise above the deluge. The gait that used to happily swing in joyous rhythms of life became a shamble of shuffles descending into deep chasms of bitterness: now his alter ego. Thirty years struggled to pass; the constant pain, the aching thirst for vengeance never passed; disdain for love had soured a spirit now in a kind of death Poor fellow! What can be done? What can friends do for him? What can life do for him? What can he do for life? Can he live again? Pity! Only he can rise from his grave of deathly sadness to cull the weeds of bitterness, to forgive and then to live again with hope, happiness, renewal. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very well done!  ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Patrick, this is so very heartfelt and ever so common between us all, sweet friend, sadly I know this feeling too and I know by experience only oneself can rise above and seek forgiveness! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs to you for this sensitive and touching write, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patrick, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
sad, but well written... KS |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
pjtalty Good one, enjoyed. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Patrick, this is a very well-written poem.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I agree, this is a really well written poem.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your closing stanza summed up the poem very well. Peace & Light, Earth Angel |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
an angst ridden ride--well done There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Enormously vote worthy piece. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
so sad, but only he can clear his own mind. Joyce |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Very, very nice write. Jason |
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Street Heart Member
since 2002-09-05
Posts 349Pennsylvania,USA |
Good Lord,Patrick,do you know me? If not,you must be psychic! You have no idea how much I am there within your work.I bet we could talk volumes together,you and I.You have written such an eloquently insightful free verse here.A "keeper" for me and you have my vote.If this is autobiographical,I sincerely hope that you find some type of healing.Man, I'm telling you...your references to duplicity,bitterness,and so on...goodness, if you only knew.The effects of betrayal and abandonment can last forever.I am not telling you this to have you reply,but read my offering in the "Corner Pub" called "9/11/2000".That is what happened to me as the "jet" of betrayal crashed into the "tower" of my belief,trust,life.Still healing and trying to turn disaster into good.Wishing you better days and better Love. Peace On Earth,Geoffrey If a man has not discovered something he is willing to die for,his life is not worth living. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
enjoyed -- great ending! hugs, g "If you suppress laughter, it goes down and spreads out your hips."- Steve Allen |
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