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kayjay
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0 posted 2003-02-21 11:03 PM

One Night

When the scent of plumeria wafts in the night,
And the woman beside you is tucked in so tight,
When the light of the moon lays a bridge on the sea,
And she whispers so softly “you’re special to me”,

When the trade winds are singing a song in the palm,
And the echos resound like a heavenly psalm,
When the rustle of banyan trees flutters like bats,
And the gypsy quartet plays as softly as cats,

When the Mozart is oozing right into your skin,
And the candles are glowing like some magic sin,
When the wine is as mellow as old Velvet Fog,
And the senses within you are warm as a dog,

When you hold in your hands this great vision of life,
And you’re young and you’re anxious that she be your wife,
When the scene painted here can still make my heart sting,
I remember that one night I had everything.

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

[This message has been edited by kayjay (02-22-2003 12:44 AM).]

Mistletoe Angel

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1 posted 2003-02-21 11:08 PM

(sigh) Oh Ken, this is very beautiful and whimsical, sweet friend, this made me feel like I was watching a symphony at an ampitheatre in the tropics, yay! (big hugggssssss) May you always hang onto everything, sweet friend, I love this, you've got my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ken, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-21-2003 11:08 PM).]

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-02-21 11:10 PM

Ken! This is magical..the flow is perfect and the words made me melt...
YOU are very special to me!
This one has to be in the book!
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

the_loner_23
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3 posted 2003-02-21 11:33 PM

This one gets my vote

Cold hands means a warm heart

aries_luv_ppl
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Universal Mind

4 posted 2003-02-22 12:09 PM

EXCELLECT!

~Every girl has a dream within.

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2003-02-22 12:17 PM

When the scent of plumeria wafts in the night,
And the woman beside you is tucked in so tight,
When the light of the moon lays a bridge on the sea,
And she whispers so softly “you’re special to me”,

When the trade winds are singing a song in the palm,
And the echos resound like a heavenly psalm,
When the rustle of banyan trees flutters like bats,
And the gypsy quartet plays as softly as cats,

================================

Im not sure which I adore more...your cadence or your imagery...wonderful romantic rhymes.!! Well done poet sir

oouuu eeee oouu ah ah ting tang walla walla bing bang ...
oouuu eeee oouu ah ah ting tang walla walla bing bang
;)

SEA

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with you

6 posted 2003-02-22 01:44 AM

"When the Mozart is oozing right into your skin,
And the candles are glowing like some magic sin,"

how beautiful!

Poet deVine

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7 posted 2003-02-22 01:47 AM

You go the flow of the beat right on with this poem! It's a lilting tale for sure.

Mysteria

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8 posted 2003-02-22 01:56 AM

Have to ditto JM hard to say which you do best or both I guess, the vision you created and the rhyme that was a smooth as butter running down hot corn. Fantastic!

~* Carpe' Diem *~

Sunshine

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9 posted 2003-02-22 06:12 AM

This...certainly takes you "there"...

you set the mood, the emotion, the sigh...
and some times, one night is all any one gets...

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-22-2003 06:12 AM).]

Earth Angel
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10 posted 2003-02-22 12:49 PM

This lyrical poem was music to my ears--and my heart...

Warm hugs,
EA

kayjay
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11 posted 2003-02-22 02:16 PM

The kindness of your comments, friends
will help to fuel the fire.
that keeps me writing at the edge
and stretches like a wire.
So Mistletoe and dearest E
and Aries, friend and "23"
and also SEA and J Marie
Mysteria and Angel E
and one we know, she's called Sunshine
and last not least but Poet deVine
all join in thoughts that come out pen
becoming part of this poet named Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Chanson
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Up Creek w/Out Paddle

12 posted 2003-02-22 11:48 PM

"...When the Mozart is oozing right into your skin..."...Ahhhh, that is a very visual line.
I like the entire poem!

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

garysgirl

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13 posted 2003-02-22 11:53 PM

Ken, you are really, really a good writer.
And I love the way you write your responses to your replies in ryhme.
Like I said you're really good, friend...you've got my vote...

Hugs,
Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-22-2003 11:54 PM).]

kayjay
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14 posted 2003-02-23 12:52 PM

To Chanson and Ethel, you make it so easy
to spin webs and stories without feeling queasy.
Your support is such fun and rewarding to read.
I thank you both; your caring I need. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Midnitesun

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15 posted 2003-02-23 09:55 AM

Well, Ken, it's alrady part of my library with one small click. Beautifully written!

And now that my nose
is twitching with scents,
I hope the book editors
take all these hints,
and place this poem
where all can see and smell
the love poetry you write so well.

Charisma

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lost in blue pages

16 posted 2003-02-23 11:28 AM

Beautiful!!!

Charisma

kayjay
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17 posted 2003-02-23 01:39 PM

Midnitesun and Charisma too
give my day a grin
Hours I spend in writing, see
results in the fix I'm in.
Dishes stack up, the garbage too;
just can't find the time.
Tending the house goes begging
I'm working on some rhyme. Thank you both!! Ken J

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

bsquirrel

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18 posted 2003-02-24 01:18 PM

Speechless.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

19 posted 2003-02-24 02:09 PM

*smiling at you*

Justbleu
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

20 posted 2003-02-24 02:18 PM

I very much enjoyed your wonderful memory of rhyme....

Bridgette

Sunshine

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21 posted 2003-02-24 02:20 PM

Now which do I like more?
'tis enchanting thus to open door
to see one pen spill rhyme in time
as folks come in to read of pine...

christian
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22 posted 2003-02-24 03:20 PM

there's nothing to say; everything else
has already been said--awesome flow, and
the rhyming is kickass.

ballad poetry, exxxactly.

Nan

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23 posted 2003-02-25 08:00 AM

May you have everything once more... This is beautifully written, kj...

kayjay
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24 posted 2003-02-25 10:10 AM

Friend Squirrel and E, just where would I be
Without your comforting posts
And Sunshine and Justbleu also give thought
Which posts do I like the "mosts"
And Christian and Nan have spoken a word
I need a rhyme better than bird.
Thanks to all..Ken J

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA

25 posted 2003-02-25 11:55 AM

We seldom forget that one night when the world was perfect and we had life at our fingertips (and too often let it slip away) and you've captured that moment perfectly in this one and captured my vote too

kayjay
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26 posted 2003-02-25 12:21 PM

Thank you, Ruth, for your kind and thoughtful comment. As long as I can find a rhyme and foot, I just love these long stories. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Joyce Johnson

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Washington State

27 posted 2003-02-26 03:55 PM

I'd like to give this one more than one little vote. I really enjoyed. Joyce

kayjay
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28 posted 2003-02-26 03:57 PM

Thank you, Joyce, for your comments on all three of my submissions for Reflections. Ken J

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now

29 posted 2003-02-26 04:19 PM

kayjay - lovely write...

BC

kayjay
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30 posted 2003-02-26 05:04 PM

Thank you, Bill, for your comments.

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

31 posted 2003-03-01 06:40 PM

beautifully written..

"I remember that one night I had everything."

Me too.
M

JP
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32 posted 2003-03-01 09:01 PM

smooth and easy. reminds me of my days in Hawaii. excellent.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

garysgirl

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Florida, USA

33 posted 2003-03-01 09:11 PM

Ken, I've already voted, but I want this one in my Library, so......

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

vandana

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34 posted 2003-03-01 09:20 PM

enjoyed

Midnitesun

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Gaia

35 posted 2003-03-16 02:51 PM

thought I'd let those dishes
sit just one more day,
to read and enjoy fine poetry
and remember how some stay
in love
no matter come
what may

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

36 posted 2003-03-16 05:11 PM

Ken...I am so overjoyed this made it into the book!
Congratulations!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Jason Lyle
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With my darkling

37 posted 2003-03-16 05:29 PM

I cannot vote
There is no space
But this need to vote
Must find a place

So submit this
Jason

Earth Angel
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38 posted 2003-03-17 01:45 PM

I just had to comment once again! I loved your rhyming replies! They made for very interesting reading!--and were extremely thoughtful!

Springtime hugs,
EA

kayjay
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since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

39 posted 2003-03-17 02:01 PM

Dear “Thoughts” JP and “Girl”
You make my head go whirl
Vandana “sun” and E, of course
Are my insight and my source
Jason, friend and Linda dear
You get me so…right here!
Thank you all!!
Your most humble scribe. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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