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jbouder
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0 posted 2003-02-19 11:17 AM


On my knees
I wait
and watch
from the narrows of the solitary pass
as the son climbs the mind-blind horizon
behind me

– Ready
with gnawed shield in-hand
to stoke coals of berserker-lust
now

cool.  Peace is a much a myth as rest
and steel needs rest to rust, so
russet pocks won't touch
my RESOLVE

that

BREAKS CHARGES
THUNDERS JUDGMENT
VITIATES THE STORM-SURGE WAVES
KEEPS THE PASS FREE OF VERMIN FEET
and the sky safe for my son to rise, therefore

I wait
and watch with owline eyes
lines reform in clouds of dust
like rows of little mice marching
and bright
in their little red eyes
I see fear

and smile

because tomorrow
I take the fight to them.


© Copyright 2003 Jim Bouder - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-02-19 11:20 AM



Yes, Jim, in tribute of your son, a poem worth holding...

Chanson
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2 posted 2003-02-19 11:38 AM


I'll share my very first thoughts to your poem:

It read like the crescendo composed into
sheet music, rising to the loudest peak
then falling, crashing off the page...

You are an inspired writer. *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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3 posted 2003-02-19 12:50 PM




(smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, your son is so lucky to have you as a loving father, with you the horizon will always gleam and the skies will be safe and sunny for him, this is a beautiful write, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jim, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Andrew Scott
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4 posted 2003-02-19 01:35 PM


An interesting read... still working out some of the underlying details.  Thanks for sharing,
the_loner_23
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5 posted 2003-02-19 01:45 PM


I really enjoyed this read. You get my vote.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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6 posted 2003-02-19 07:04 PM


I like it very much (not so sure about the all caps part, but hey! you're the poet).
ellie LeJeune
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7 posted 2003-02-19 07:15 PM


I like this poem, so sureal and delighfully haunting...Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

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8 posted 2003-02-19 07:52 PM


An intrigueing read....Very Good!!!!

Bridgette

Jason Lyle
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9 posted 2003-02-19 07:58 PM


And I also vote......nice write.
Jason

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10 posted 2003-02-19 08:15 PM


Courage depicted with the beauty of love.

just awesome, j.

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11 posted 2003-02-20 12:29 PM


and the sky safe for my son to rise, therefore

I wait
and watch with owline eyes
lines reform in clouds of dust
like rows of little mice marching
and bright
in their little red eyes
I see fear

and smile

because tomorrow
I take the fight to them.
====================================


I recall other poems for you son...and how they touched me. This is a layered complex write that comes from when a poet writes from the places deep.
Well done poet sir...good to read you again.

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ...  it then directs your course."

K.Gibran


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12 posted 2003-02-20 12:59 PM


A beautiful tribute.

This definately deserves to be included in the book.

Maree

vlraynes
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13 posted 2003-02-20 01:03 AM



Jim~
This is a touching write.
Wonderfully done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Kit McCallum
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14 posted 2003-02-20 07:19 AM


I loved this right from the descriptive title, to the powerful closing. Just wonderful, Jim!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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15 posted 2003-02-20 09:30 AM


and smile because tomorrow
I take the fight to them

you go!!!

Sudhir Iyer
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16 posted 2003-02-20 12:48 PM


Wonderful work, Jim...

regards,
sudhir

jbouder
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17 posted 2003-02-20 01:04 PM


Thanks everyone.  Glad you all enjoyed it.

Jim

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18 posted 2003-02-20 04:14 PM


Wonderful write Jim.
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19 posted 2003-02-23 05:57 PM


I could feel the courage and resolve in this, Jim. Excellent expression.

One of the many blessings that your son will be thankful for will be to have had a dad like you who was with him and for him through it all.

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20 posted 2003-02-23 07:06 PM


'I wait
and watch with owline eyes
lines reform in clouds of dust
like rows of little mice marching
and bright
in their little red eyes
I see fear

and smile

because tomorrow
I take the fight to them.'


Cool verse.  I come see 'em marching...

Elizabeth Santos
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21 posted 2003-02-23 07:48 PM


Yes! It is the "SON" rising up behind you.
(Great thoughts)
I like the power, the resolve and the "owl line eyes" in this poem. THis will most assuredly go into the book.
In admiration,
Liz

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22 posted 2003-02-23 08:21 PM


Much enjoyed...one for the book!!

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Nan
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23 posted 2003-02-25 08:20 AM


This is a battle I know you've been waging... and sure you've been winning... I'd be proud to see this wondrous piece published...
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24 posted 2003-02-25 02:35 PM


Poems about your son have always spoken so well to me. How proud he will be of his Daddy to have a poem written about him in the new book.

                           Dawn

Nicole
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25 posted 2003-02-27 07:29 AM


A tribute that I would like to see between the covers of a book.  You fight a parent's fight, with courage, compassion, and love.  Inspiring..
Seymour Tabin
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26 posted 2003-02-27 08:52 AM


jbouder
Enjoyed the read.

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27 posted 2003-02-27 08:59 AM


Jim, I could tell that every word of this poem is written from your heart, with much tenderness and love.....exactly what I would like to see in the book.....
.
.
Hugs,
Ethel

Bill Charles
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28 posted 2003-02-27 09:08 PM


jbouder - I'm glad I stopped by to read this, my vote is cast...

BC

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29 posted 2003-03-08 05:51 PM


Some of the most poignant poetry comes from within a heart and soul that has been bruised.  I am sorry for your residual pain but no greater tribute could be written for a son than you have done with this piece, and it has my vote.

           
R.E.S.P.E.C.T.
Aretha Franklin  

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30 posted 2003-03-16 03:33 PM


The title drew me in....very powerful...


Lauren~

Here I am
Running after dreams ~
I made it through another lonely night
Thinking of you
I know I should be strong
I just can’t say ~goodbye~(LR)

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