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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash 
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On my knees I wait and watch from the narrows of the solitary pass as the son climbs the mind-blind horizon behind me – Ready with gnawed shield in-hand to stoke coals of berserker-lust now cool. Peace is a much a myth as rest and steel needs rest to rust, so russet pocks won't touch my RESOLVE that BREAKS CHARGES THUNDERS JUDGMENT VITIATES THE STORM-SURGE WAVES KEEPS THE PASS FREE OF VERMIN FEET and the sky safe for my son to rise, therefore I wait and watch with owline eyes lines reform in clouds of dust like rows of little mice marching and bright in their little red eyes I see fear and smile because tomorrow I take the fight to them. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, Jim, in tribute of your son, a poem worth holding... |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
I'll share my very first thoughts to your poem: It read like the crescendo composed into sheet music, rising to the loudest peak then falling, crashing off the page... You are an inspired writer. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, your son is so lucky to have you as a loving father, with you the horizon will always gleam and the skies will be safe and sunny for him, this is a beautiful write, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jim, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
An interesting read... still working out some of the underlying details. Thanks for sharing, |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I really enjoyed this read. You get my vote.  Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like it very much (not so sure about the all caps part, but hey! you're the poet).  |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
I like this poem, so sureal and delighfully haunting...Ellie A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
An intrigueing read....Very Good!!!! Bridgette |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
And I also vote......nice write. Jason |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Courage depicted with the beauty of love. just awesome, j. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and the sky safe for my son to rise, therefore I wait and watch with owline eyes lines reform in clouds of dust like rows of little mice marching and bright in their little red eyes I see fear and smile because tomorrow I take the fight to them. ==================================== I recall other poems for you son...and how they touched me. This is a layered complex write that comes from when a poet writes from the places deep. Well done poet sir...good to read you again. " ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A beautiful tribute. This definately deserves to be included in the book. Maree |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Jim~ This is a touching write. Wonderfully done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I loved this right from the descriptive title, to the powerful closing. Just wonderful, Jim! Best wishes, /Kit |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
and smile because tomorrow I take the fight to them you go!!! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Wonderful work, Jim... regards, sudhir |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Thanks everyone. Glad you all enjoyed it. Jim |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Wonderful write Jim. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I could feel the courage and resolve in this, Jim. Excellent expression. One of the many blessings that your son will be thankful for will be to have had a dad like you who was with him and for him through it all. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'I wait and watch with owline eyes lines reform in clouds of dust like rows of little mice marching and bright in their little red eyes I see fear and smile because tomorrow I take the fight to them.' Cool verse. I come see 'em marching... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Yes! It is the "SON" rising up behind you. (Great thoughts) I like the power, the resolve and the "owl line eyes" in this poem. THis will most assuredly go into the book. In admiration, Liz |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Much enjoyed...one for the book!! ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is a battle I know you've been waging... and sure you've been winning... I'd be proud to see this wondrous piece published...  |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Poems about your son have always spoken so well to me. How proud he will be of his Daddy to have a poem written about him in the new book. Dawn |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
A tribute that I would like to see between the covers of a book. You fight a parent's fight, with courage, compassion, and love. Inspiring.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
jbouder Enjoyed the read. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Jim, I could tell that every word of this poem is written from your heart, with much tenderness and love.....exactly what I would like to see in the book.....  . . Hugs, Ethel |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
jbouder - I'm glad I stopped by to read this, my vote is cast... BC |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Some of the most poignant poetry comes from within a heart and soul that has been bruised. I am sorry for your residual pain but no greater tribute could be written for a son than you have done with this piece, and it has my vote. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
The title drew me in....very powerful... Lauren~ Here I am |
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