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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion 
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The blazing torch, there bursting forth Was luminescent for the world to see. I with no recourse, you with no remorse, When you took that brand from me. My anger flashed, my spirits crashed, As you surrendered to anxiety. Trust, once dashed, is hardest to catch, Even harder, when repeatedly. The truth be said, it's better instead, That, in myself, I not believe, Than to gain regret, and lose respect, When you rescind your trust in me. The confession, Dear, the lesson here, Applies equally for one and all. When oppression rears, depression appears, And we spend love breaking the fall. If the torch is my test, do not second guess, Let me try and even fail on my own. Our love will bless the result regardless, And we'll revel in the way we have grown. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Yes, in the pursuit of life and enlightenment of it, we must not despair, but rather reach out with love, and run this marathon and pass the torch on to others, who everyone is truly a brother and sister of each other to God! (big huggggsss) So achieve that second win....and you can win with loves perserverance, God Bless You, this has my Olympian vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sahring!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I loved this. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
The meter sort of caught in my mouth every once in a while, but otherwise, this is great. And I love "we spend love breaking the fall." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Yes!! THIS is wonderful...love it! It's got my vote. ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Squirrel - Read it just a little bit slower and the rhythm seems to heal itself. When I read it fast, I have the same catches (I assume). When I read it slowly, it seems to flow smoothly. hmmmm - a tempo issue if there ever was one. Thanks one and all for your comments. I was trying to say that it's better to let somebody try, than to step in and "just do it ourselves," even if their failure is possible. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
pass the torch...pass the vote... well done poet sir. "Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky ... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Every Reflection should carry a message... and you, Sir, have brought it with you, torch and all... welcome home, Sailor! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
As you would probably guess, I do like poems that are written with poems within poems. I also like the message here about learning within and/or from our disagreements and ultimately knowing that true Love will always overcome. Enjoyed reading your poetry here very much. -Bob |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
nicely written work... regards, sudhir |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LngJhnAg Well done my friend, you have my vote. |
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Essorant Member Elite
since 2002-08-10
Posts 4769Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada |
I really admired the tone and the message of your piece; very well expressed. take care, Essorant [This message has been edited by Essorant (02-21-2003 02:15 PM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Always reading with a southern drawl, it sounds dern near perfect to these ears. *S* |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
YES!!  Charisma |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
I enjoyed this poem. A good moral point... “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Another very good book submission....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Wonderful poem! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yanno I miss your wisdom buddy, this was great! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Beautiful. Love the internal rhyme. And on my tongue it flows smoothly *s M |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well done, Mike! I hadn't seen this one before...voting here Only one error...you spelled 'Deer" wrong  |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Trust, once dashed, is hardest to catch, Even harder, when repeatedly." When oppression rears, depression appears, "And we spend love breaking the fall." such truths here... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This one skips along and it would be a shame if it was skipped for the book, so it has my vote. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I sure do love reading you. This belongs in da book. voting Maree  |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Our failures turn into life lessons and can be accepted better when love binds. Nicely said. *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Nothing wrong with the meter or the theme..or the spelling of 'dear'. Enjoyed this very much. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
LJ...we miss you here |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Well, you torched me with this one, you soft hearted kitty kicker. Click. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
September 2000... was a very lovely time, wasn't it?... Must've been to inspire you to write this gem, my sweet friend...  |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This is quite nice.....Enjoyed Much!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This poem burns brightly on the page--and in my mind! Wonderfully penned, Dear sailor! Warm morning hugs, Linda |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
LJA, Yup voting now! But where is your funny bone? If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Well done, Mike. I enjoyed this. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi LJA, and I loved the sentiment of this one so much! The check is in the box!! Accept these small gifts from my gypsy soul, and let the magik happen! ~~S~~ |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Absolutely beautiful. You've got my vote. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
There is a wise man behind the mask of ridicule There is a good heart between the lines of comical verses There is a gentle spirit behind this wonderful verse Voting for the poem and the poet Liz |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
LngJhnAg - I'm very glad that I stopped by to read this one. I missed it many times.... My vote is cast... BC |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
How could I have missed this one I'll never know. Definitely getting my vote, sailor. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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