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Crossroads |
Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Crossroads All these paths, they lead to you, Yet these steps also carry me away, For the bond was broken, like decayed glue, And from this new path, it is easy to stray. I never thought, I would walk alone, Treading the path without you here, Now I have lost and despair has grown Alongside all of my fear. The path of suicide, an end to this life, A sudden release it tempts me, But I turn from it, I desire a wife, Not an empty and lifeless eternity. The path of new love, there it glows, Lighting the faces of new feeling, But the sight of you, inside me grows, And from this path, I am forever reeling. The path of solitude, a chance to stand alone, Myself, I would never dream to betray, Steeling the heart, as cold as icy stone, Sorrow fills me, and from this, I turn away. The path of resurrection, I can rise again, Beholding the beauty, of life in my palm, Over my happiness I shall reign, But of love I would have great qualm. The path of reunion, us together, The warm emotions call to me, But like paper, the image does whether, And I stand by myself, angrily. Which road do I take?Too many to choose, And in all it seems I suffer pain, Why bother?I seem doomed to lose, Has my adult life been in vain? I call out to my strength, desperate to survive, Alone, reunited, dead, or new love, I care not, Just let me rejoin the path, feeling strong and alive Instead of this mournful hell, where I’ll rot. A new path comes to me, hazy and unclear, I tread on it carefully and the feelings converge, I step out, full of fear, Not knowing, where I shall emerge. I see so many things on my walk, Pain, love, sorrow, joy, all are mine, This is what I can have, if only I’d stalk The path of destiny, truly divine. I understand the riddle and enter the light, Knowing that what comes is what will be, Love and loss it will be alright, As long as I face, the threat of insanity’s eternity… |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Great feeling of desperation here. Well written. Joyce |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thanks for the feedback, despair is the cornerstone of this piece and um... not much else to add really! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssssss) Oh Peter, this is so very sad, sweet friend, I think the ticket is to take the path by which your aeshetic reaction leads to most of all, there are many roads but one always seems to be eye candy to you! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Peter, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thank you for the response, this was one of the most difficult poems for me to write ('accident of birth' being the other) as the feelings within this one are all my own, but it helps to expiate the sorrow through verse |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Peter, this tugs at my heartstrings. Your pain is palpable. I extend a wing to you that we may rise above the madding crowd so that you might gain a new perspective. You certainly can evoke strong feelings in your readers! Angel hugs, EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (02-20-2003 06:06 PM).] |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thanks for your support, it is important to gain a new perspective and move on, the poetry helkps and the enthusiasm that is read with helps all the more |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
Peter, I love most of it. I can almost feel it. Written beautifully. I don't like the ending though. If the emotion of the feelings can carry through the poem, then I think it is all better. This is just my humble opinion. I know not to critiqe a poem. I'm a beginner in writing poetry. But I tell what i think. Hope you don't mind ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Say what you feel, thanks for reading and considering the piece. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This was extremely heartfelt and sadly I identify with this walk so you did express the depression well, and yet I felt some home in this - great purging, and yes I agree - the feedback does help. Keep writing it is a wonderful healer. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Love the poem, "I understand the riddle and enter the light, Knowing that what comes is what will be, Love and loss it will be alright, As long as I face, the threat of insanity’s eternity" I understand this completely. M |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thanks for all the feedback, without people like you lot reading and commenting there is no poetry |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Many people find it hard to struggle to find their way in life. If we walk with friends it's much easier. And I agree, without readers, there would be no poetry. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Nicely written... lots of great lines in there... regards, sudhir |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thanks for the feedback people, nice to see you all enjoying my work |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
I am so glad that I decided to wander to the starting point of Reflections - because I found this and liked it and my vote is in. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
A very beautiful write. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thank you all very much, it makes me feel truly happy that someone gets great satisfaction from my work |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
A very emotional, and sad write. Very nicely done. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
That long stretch of time between heartache and feeling like you are living life again....This was sooo sad!!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
A very good poem. |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
thank you very much for the positivie feedback |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Time for a little bump maybe???????? |
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Poet4Christ Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 211Oklahoma City |
Peter - Your poem is so driven and pure to the core of your heart. I really felt it. It was very well written and developed. I will be the first to confess, sometimes longer poems get to me, but this one was like a great epic movie that seemed to flash across my eyes in great emotion. I sincerely enjoyed it and would love to see it in the book. God bless you - Thanx - Tim He that trusteth in his own heart is a fool: but whoso walketh wisely, he shall be delivered. Proverbs 28:26 |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thanks very much for the positivie feedback |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a bit long but well worth the read... |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Peter There was so much emotion in each and every verse and I could relate as I have suffered depression in the past and know these feelings so well. Thank you for sharing your talent. "Love is the lifeline I cling to when grief threatens to pull me down into eternal darkness." Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
came back to admire the rhyme scheme, and take the journey again...nice writing! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I have been the negligent voter for a time, but glad I'm able to vote for you now. I AM a fan of your style, very polished and tightly constructed. So...just another vote here, to let you know I appreciate your work, and although I have been a silent fan for some time, I thought it might be nice to let YOU know... |
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Peter J Marcroft Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 265York, England |
Thank you very much, all of you, the fact that youi all read it means more to me than the pieces themselves |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Bump.... "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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