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Ratleader

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0 posted 2003-02-19 11:51 PM

Dog In The Sun

In the sun now sleep,
And wag awake when they come home.
Dogs remember, see through young eyes,
Running rabbits through the wheat
And later crossing to the pasture spring,
Wading, drinking, turning home.
Did you catch them? Does it matter?
Dogs know not to question dreams.
The chasing would be pain now,
Rather drowse in sunshine than to run
Through stubble fields, the places too well known,
While rabbits lope ahead and pausing, turn
And run again. Sleep now. Sleep till they come home,
And dream of wheat.

the_loner_23
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1 posted 2003-02-19 11:53 PM

Awesome poem. i really enjoyed it

Cold hands means a warm heart

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2 posted 2003-02-19 11:55 PM

Ed--I would run the sun in swirl of dog and fun this is so cool. Love this write! Voting. Hugs!

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3 posted 2003-02-19 11:56 PM

Seems that you can write about things other than the Urban(e).

And having two ancient Damndogs meself, appreciate this as more (or less) than metaphor.

Good stuff,Ed

Ed

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4 posted 2003-02-20 12:01 PM

Hi wranx! Yep, until I was 12, I had a wheat field (with no fence) adjacent to my yard. A sign on our road said "Travel At Your Own Risk"....

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Poet deVine

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5 posted 2003-02-20 12:06 PM

I enjoyed.

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6 posted 2003-02-20 12:22 PM

VERY COOL!!!! Enjoyed this!!!!

Bridgette

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7 posted 2003-02-20 12:53 PM

(smiles) Oh Ed, this is breathtaking, sweet friend, the vision of the open field of wheat and barley reminded me of Watership Down with all the cute hares, I just love how you paint with your words, this has my vote, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ed, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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Shakira

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8 posted 2003-02-20 01:02 AM

Love the imagery in this. enjoyed.

Maree

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9 posted 2003-02-20 01:36 AM

Well, hello Ed

It's about time you put a poem in for book submission....you made a very good choice, too. I like this one.....and I love dogs, too....

Ethel

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10 posted 2003-02-20 01:58 AM

Well just a dandy submission and makes me want to run in there with those dogs

Off to vote now, see ya.

~* Carpe' Diem *~

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11 posted 2003-02-20 05:22 AM

Nice read!
Jason

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12 posted 2003-02-20 08:03 AM

I've often watched my dog
run in her sleep, woofing gently
in the hunt of the ever-elusive
rabbit or squirrel...

she wakes, wagging her tail,

sometimes

dreams are realized...

Chanson
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13 posted 2003-02-20 08:25 AM

Ahhh, to have the colorful
life of a dog.
Well said, Ratleader.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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14 posted 2003-02-20 08:40 AM

You captured the carefree essence of our canine friends with this energizing and uplifting poem! I loved it!

Warm hugs to you this beautiful morning! (at least it is in my neck of the woods!)

EA

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15 posted 2003-02-20 12:44 PM

I like the feel of this one. I think the rat has run with the dogs a time or two.

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16 posted 2003-02-20 01:56 PM

I just like the idea of dreaming of unmade bread.

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17 posted 2003-02-21 12:38 PM

Aye, Andrew, that he has! I owned that dog. So did several neighbors.....

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Sudhir Iyer
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18 posted 2003-02-21 03:56 AM

This is wonderful...

Regards,
Sudhir

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19 posted 2003-02-21 04:02 AM

enjoyed the read

Charisma

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20 posted 2003-02-21 12:55 PM

I read it to the dog, he agreed...great poem!

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21 posted 2003-02-21 05:00 PM

Someone pointed your poems my way--glad they did.

J

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22 posted 2003-02-21 05:22 PM

How I love this. I am sitting here with my little couch potato of a dog far away in dreamland. She is such a lazy little border terrier that I am sure the only real exercise she gets is in her dreams. Gets my vote.

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23 posted 2003-02-24 08:02 AM

Loved the concept here. Makes me smile.

Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat

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24 posted 2003-02-24 09:26 AM

*smiling here* Enjoyed this one very much Ed.
~Hugs & a vote~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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25 posted 2003-02-24 09:34 AM

This is one of the best descriptions of Toerag I have ever seen written. j/k - This poem sure reminded me of some old dogs I've known in the past. Well done.

Nan

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26 posted 2003-02-24 01:18 PM

Very good write, Ed...

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27 posted 2003-02-24 02:33 PM

Ratleader; You have the ability to take a simple subject and turn it into something quite extraordinary! This is great! It definitely should be in the book and it has my vote!

Betty Lou Hebert

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christian
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28 posted 2003-02-24 03:16 PM

hey, interesting take here. the language
draws the reader in as well, it's a
thumbs up from me--click.

-chris.

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29 posted 2003-02-24 08:14 PM

Excellent subject matter, Ed. There are few things sadder than a dog growing old. My dog used to jump up on the bed to lick my face....after years, he would come to the bed, look up and then walk away, knowing he wouldn't make it if he tried. I'll swear I could see the sadness on his face...they don't understand - they just know it is.

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30 posted 2003-02-24 08:50 PM

I know there's cat people in here but jesus, I'll take a dog anyday!

Ratleader

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31 posted 2003-02-25 09:24 AM

Shoot, I like all kindsa aenimals..... but in my whole life I've only met two cats who liked me, and just one dog who didn't.

Besides, it's hard to get a cat to keep you company while you chase rabbits....

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32 posted 2003-03-01 08:51 PM

Ed...Sounds like once upon a time you use to be a country boy that would play chase with the neighborhood dogs. Enjoyed the poem...Paul

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33 posted 2003-03-02 05:42 AM

I like this part, and so amused:

"Dogs know not to question dreams.
The chasing would be pain now,
Rather drowse in sunshine than to run
Through stubble fields, ..."

here's my vote.

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34 posted 2003-03-10 10:15 AM

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35 posted 2003-03-10 07:39 PM

Ratleader,

I love this. It is a subject close to my heart. I love my little guys and I'm going to read this to them. They are smart and have me wrapped around their paws.

SimplyGold

P.S. I do hope this gets in because the subject is so charmning.

Lighthousebob
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36 posted 2003-03-17 02:22 PM

(Smiles) Like the dog, I guess we all appear much more virile and limber in our dreams... I do hate, though, when I wake up with a leg cramp from a fervent sleep run... Darn dogs (even the old ones) are much too hard to catch even in my dreams when they spy a rabbit. Sorry, I've gone to ramblin' now. Anyway, good poem that inspired some nice thoughts and memories and gets a vote from me.

-Bob

PS. Glad this poem made into the book!!!!

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littlewing
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37 posted 2003-03-19 12:58 PM

Rat - good for you - nice job here - means more to me than you know - just lost my choc lab - as always - congrats! You belong in here xxoo

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