Open Poetry #24 |
Clouds Over Jade |
Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Never clear in your mind What part of me Touched you intimately Heavily guarded places Overgrown with thorns To prick even the brave With a warning, "Keep out!" Never clear in your mind Why I remain on the tip Of thoughts, An emotional tempest, Threatening downpour Of knife edged feelings Quickly silenced & buried Deep in a nothing past Easier to theorize Covertly yet publicly Chastise the predictable Mysterious unfathomable Depths of so-called me Indeed, I acquiesce Bow out to allow you Do your best Dissect You'll only find what's Yours, theirs, and mine Hearts bleeding experience Choking on the smut of Reality while secretly looking For "greener" times Or is it the perpetually new? But it was never really clear From your point of view, Was it? Sunkissed. [This message has been edited by Sunkissed (01-02-2003 10:07 AM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I like the way you write...very much to the point. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us..... "Love makes the world go around" |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This is piece is bold and prominent. Well done. ThisDiamond |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
very good, very intense look at jaded love |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Title drew me in...not what I was expecting, but then I've come to learn that you hold treasures...always. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
stunning write...I enjoyed this |
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