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Sunkissed
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0 posted 2003-01-02 09:59 AM


Never clear in your mind
What part of me
Touched you intimately
Heavily guarded places
Overgrown with thorns
To prick even the brave
With a warning,
"Keep out!"

Never clear in your mind
Why I remain on the tip
Of thoughts,
An emotional tempest,
Threatening downpour
Of knife edged feelings
Quickly silenced & buried
Deep in a nothing past

Easier to theorize
Covertly yet publicly
Chastise the predictable
Mysterious unfathomable
Depths of so-called me
Indeed, I acquiesce
Bow out to allow you
Do your best

Dissect

You'll only find what's
Yours, theirs, and mine
Hearts bleeding experience
Choking on the smut of
Reality while secretly looking
For "greener" times
Or is it the perpetually new?
But it was never really clear
From your point of view,
Was it?


Sunkissed.

[This message has been edited by Sunkissed (01-02-2003 10:07 AM).]

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garysgirl
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1 posted 2003-01-02 10:28 AM


I like the way you write...very much to the point. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us.....  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2003-01-02 10:38 AM


This is piece is bold and prominent.  Well done. ThisDiamond
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Gaia
3 posted 2003-01-02 11:01 AM


very good, very intense look at jaded love
Sunshine
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4 posted 2003-01-02 11:47 AM



Title drew me in...not what I was expecting, but then I've come to learn that you hold treasures...always.

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5 posted 2003-01-02 12:39 PM


stunning write...I enjoyed this
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