Open Poetry #24 |
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Balancing (new revision) |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion ![]() |
Balancing These toes are whitened, curled tightly over the ledge’s lip; body tipped and expectant, poised to tumble until limp limbs collapse. I’ll throw myself headlong into your bracing winds, fearing your feathers won’t hold me. You boast of talents, tongues flicking with something exquisitely close to pain; leaving me to weep. I’ll wear my anticipation visibly, points of compass rising hard and icy as stars. Soon, you’ll drift from cloud to cloud, hurt me with insincere visions. You have the girth of the constellations for a buoy, but I know what it is to fall. © 2002 Core [This message has been edited by Corinne (12-15-2002 11:23 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Loved the original love the revision ![]() |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I am a Libra, and I know this well. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I had on my calendar a date...to ask you, "how's it coming?"... It was dated 12/26. Thought I would go ahead and ask now... ![]() just 'cuz... |
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Cpat Hair![]()
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
this is stronger...more bite to the words...and make me want to just give you hug...in case the feathers don't hold you... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cor, Good and thoughtful write, enjoyed. |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (smiles) Awwwwwwwwww, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I love this! (kiss on cheek) Both versions are filled with so much grave and heart, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks, Aenimal! Thank you passing shadows - I know Libras well (no one myself, though). Thank you, Sunshine! Well, a lot of irons in the fire, you know? Lots of projects going on simultaneously. How is yours coming along? Cpat - I won't ever turn down a hug! Thank you! thanks Sey! Thanks as always, Noah! Cor |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Corinne~ This is a well written and well expressed piece. I much enjoyed the read. ![]() Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Corinne...see that extra few irons in the fire? Mine are in there, too! LOL ![]() They'll get done, the both of 'em! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Hi sweet poet, I hope this isn't a sign of unexpected changes. Great write anyway. ![]() Parker |
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