Open Poetry #24 |
Splicing The Main |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
The foaming crest before the steel of blackened hue this man of war. Where battles fought are gruesome, real and take these men to places far. A gentle swell does rock and sway this mighty ship of doomsday make. As cresting waves in whispers say we give to you our souls to take. The sea that gives and takes their lives on days of calm or stormy seas. Where sailors bed without their wives and humbly bow on bended knees. These souls that sail, that take to foe the steel of battleās fiery hail. Though fear is real, will never show as warriors climb the bloody rail. A plank awaits the coward's fate should one turn tail and cry to leave. As sailors fight beside their mate and share their blood on crimson sleeve. To the portside they turn the sail till land is seen up on the main. A wayward wench, a pint of Ale shall raise the mast without a strain. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
very, very excellent writing, Barry |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Salt spray...cold...immortal. Saw the perfect storm in these lines. Great eyes Mag! TD |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
a valiant write |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry You write the sea, the sailor's storm, so well, so real. Emjoyed! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Barry, this is so well-written and the imagery is amazing, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I sometimes wonder how you have such a story to tell, how you get the words like this... |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
excellent tribute...here's hoping peace will find us--enjoyed! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
This drug me back and forth between the centuries, and the continents. The salt spray stung, as well. Magnus, this is perhaps one of your quieter, stronger pieces. Keep this up, and you will be published. This gave me chills. Rightly so, Cap'n. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, Good thoughts, good write, good read, enjoyed. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Barry~ you are so good at revealing the story behind your words.....Hats off to you sir.... Deep inside the stillness |
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Music Maker Member
since 2002-07-07
Posts 152THE ORIGINAL !!!! |
As an Ex Matelot (A sailor in the British Royal Navy), who experienced personally rough seas, and having to climb to the top of the mast in Force 9 gales (sadly to fix a radar aerial, rather than to mend sails!), and also seen the brutal reality of combat, I found this write hit me right in the spot. Crafted words, that if you havn't also experienced these things too, show a perceptiveness beyond belief. A write that conjured up visions long forgotten, and possibly (for me!) best forgotten. Kind thoughts and Seasonal Felicitations from the Music Maker (John) Someone who thinks logically provides a nice contrast to the real world. |
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