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Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

0 posted 2002-12-30 03:57 AM

If You Are Mine
By: Noah Eaton
12/30/02

Our hieroglyphics can be soiled with tar
Every wise man can be tried as illogical
When candles are thinned from the flame
And the moths are aggregated in a dead silent vibe
And should the hate never be extinguished from this worlds soils
If the good old times return and leave you homesick
If the serpent taints every apple on every tree
And if this is my last breath, the last verse I'm allowed to speak

But as long as you're here with me
And I can feel your breath
And I can hear your heart sing like a music box
As long as you swear the oath
That you still love me as I love you
I will survive this big flood
Because you mean the world to me
And I worship you
Without you every day is like the same crossword puzzle
But if you will be mine forever
My heart will go on...

Should innocence be tampered and contorted
If all the remaining fish are left to swim in fishbowl asylums
If every friend I've made was just a riddle in flannel
When I can't tell what is right and wrong
If my fundamentals are all torn to shreds
If I fail to make my own convictions
If every poet is left to play this accordion
To spell out one last elegy on the Scrabble board

But as long as you're here with me
And I can feel your breath
And I can hear your heart sing like a music box
As long as you swear the oath
That you still love me as I love you
I will survive this big flood
Because you mean the world to me
And I worship you
Without you every day is the same crossword puzzle
But if you will be mine forever
My heart will go on...

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-30-2002 04:04 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2002-12-30 04:05 AM

awwww Noah, this is sort of sad, but very beautiful and romantic!

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

2 posted 2002-12-30 04:17 AM

This is beautiful!! So sweet and flows as a song ..from the soul.
I really love this, well penned!

Keep i up.
Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2002-12-30 07:21 AM

"When candles are thinned from the flame"

"If every friend I've made was just a riddle in flannel"

Dear, sweet Noah ... your words are as tender and loving as your heart. What a lovely piece. Full of warmth, commitment, longevity and love. Very beautiful.

Best wishes,
/Kit

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

4 posted 2002-12-30 11:02 AM

nice

kayjay
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since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

5 posted 2002-12-30 11:36 AM

You blend a wondrous vocabulary with such constrasting images, Sir Angel. It is always a pleasure to read you. KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

6 posted 2002-12-30 11:55 AM

Noah,

A wonderful, deep, lasting love, you've portrayed. I like this a great deal.

May this new year bring you abiding and beautiful love, that which your heart gives back to all of us, in your responses to other poetry and in your own, as well.
Hugs and love Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Salty
Senior Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 669
Texas

7 posted 2002-12-30 12:26 PM

Love your comparisons ....love the message.
A most excellent write!

Let me spell out *B R A V O* from my scrabble game.

~Salty

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
--Deepak Chop

NewEnglandlazurlu
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

8 posted 2002-12-30 12:52 PM

Noah, another beautiful, heartfelt piece.

Hugs and Happy New Year, Marti

A poem is never finished, only abandoned.
Paul Valery

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

9 posted 2002-12-30 01:19 PM

HUGSSSSSSSSSSSSSS

this is beautiful.....

Lauren~

I sing to life
To it's tragic beauty
To pain and strife
Let all that dances through me
The rise and the fall, I lived through it all

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

10 posted 2002-12-30 04:04 PM

OOHHH Noah, this is SOOOO beautiful.....
And what makes it so special is that I know it comes from your
heart, dear friend. You are so sweet and one of the dearest friends
I've made here at PIP. You have such a caring and compassionate
heart, sweet Noah.
THANK YOU FOR BEING YOU, DEAR NOAH....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

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