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Twisting to You
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Twisting to You |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Is there an origin in other lives shared, or is it too simple to call this chance instead of unresolved desire? Twisting to You There must be reasons for remaining innocent - this curl of a whirlpool entwining our roots into evergreen. Feel this barefoot path, there is nothing to catch us, we’ll sink into its wet bank, slide into summer's river - I’ll float, you ripple. My hands become shy when you brush against them, they slide stealthily into silt. You show me smooth stones hiding their grainy insides, round with time, our time to ride the stream. © 2002 Core [This message has been edited by Corinne (12-16-2002 11:48 PM).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Corrine, you can certainly lead a man down the right path..I love the images and metaphors you employ here  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
ohhh, I liked that.  Hey! What happened to this smille? It has a little hat! haha. Back to your poem. It created vivid images and intense perspective. You have captured my attention as usual.Never be normal! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Corinne, this is so lovely, sweet friend, and may the waters always smoothen the shores of your heart! (kiss on cheek) This is special, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Very calming thoughts |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you do free verse so well, I'm envious |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Feel this barefoot path, there is nothing to catch us, we’ll sink into its wet bank, slide into summer's river - I’ll float, you ripple. nice... very nice.... but then again I have come to expect this from you...and have yet to be disappointed... enjoyed the image and metaphor... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Outstanding, Cor. I love the feel of smooth pebbles in the silt. Excellent metaphors, as usual. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I like the "barefoot path" you painted with your words.....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cor, A very good read, enjoyed. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you dear Deer, Wind, Noah, Aenimal, passingshadows, sweet Ron, Midnight, Garysgirl and Sey! Cor |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
"unresolved desire"--powerful phrase, excellent write! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne Enjoyed the metaphor of this and you always manage such satisfying endings. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Sandpaper and Martie! Cor |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Enjoyed the read very very much... Smiles2uPoetFriend Corinne *~coco~* |
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