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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

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0 posted 2002-12-28 07:40 AM

Illustrious rivers, industrious roll
to tempest tossed oceans whose mean undertow
cuffs the inductee and roughly control
tributaries who ferry the toll

Rivers who rove, roam, ramble and traipse,
that drag along streams from mountain landscapes
and petty theft creeks as they larcen the lakes
end confined to the brine, no escape

Streams that rob rivulets, runnel and rill,
cascading waterfalls over the hills,
brooks bribing springs with the promise of thrills
slither on to the salty swill

Pounding downpours gorging oxbows and swamps,
storm surged, encouraged as forges by trompes,
submerging what's firm in riotous romp
then converging more pious than pomp

The oceans abound with the souvenirs
of the notions of high grounded domineers
whose devotions were found to be mutineers,
sweet emotions we drown in your tears

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2002-12-28 07:49 AM

RSWells
All true and all valid. The pour of your stream is very strong. Enjoyed

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2002-12-28 11:03 AM

Richard...this was a pleasure to read!

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

3 posted 2002-12-28 11:08 AM

Yes, Richard, you do speak the truth. I enjoyed reading this......

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2002-12-28 01:00 PM

I love the way this one pours itself downstream, definitely awash with excellent visuals and rhythm.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2002-12-28 01:49 PM

This peice flowed with endless truths. As always Richard, a pleasure to read you.

Sandpiper
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

6 posted 2002-12-29 07:03 AM

..a breathless read..(glad I learned to swim!!), the last line is a waterfall--enjoyed!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

7 posted 2002-12-29 09:54 AM

"Rivers who rove, roam, ramble and traipse,
that drag along streams from mountain landscapes
and petty theft creeks as they larcen the lakes
end confined to the brine, no escape"

Excellent imagery, Richard ... the flow of this piece grabbed me and pulled me right along to the ocean's end. Wonderful alliteration in the opening line above as well. Much enjoyed.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2002-12-29 11:06 AM

Just shaking my head...
at all that was read...

Magnifique!

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

9 posted 2002-12-29 03:05 PM

The oceans abound with the souvenirs
of the notions of high grounded domineers
whose devotions were found to be mutineers,
sweet emotions we drown in your tears

Richard, Richard...you have to get published, and this is the last time I say it.

You know that this one surely went straight to the core of me especially now. Bravo!

sigheyes
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since 2001-04-25

Posts 323
the winds of destiny

10 posted 2002-12-29 04:33 PM

Very thought provoking and enjoyed.

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