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When The Last Straw Snaps It Stings |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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Sadness tastes cold to a heart's tastebuds and the texture is torture when dragged across my soul. I can taste tears ripping an opening in my forced closed mouth trying to release an acrid voice too forlorn to sound beautiful. and I should be beautiful my voice or my heart but they are choking on ill whispers and anger. Have you ever had sadness sucker punch you so hard it stole your breath all the while with a wicked grin decorating its hateful face? Have you ever lost yourself on the bottom as if you'd crawled through the cracks and become a part of the filth that merges after years with the stone? Just when I thought I had fallen far enough another brutal impact sends me to my knees. I am weeping again and even a hand will not hold me steady. ~~I Love You~~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
You bring despair to life, filthy on its knees, in the mud -- and make it true. A rare gift you've got, Jenn. |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"ripping an opening in my forced closed mouth" Ohhhhhh how I know this feeling ... Dang! You have clearly expressed it here with much power ... you need more than hand ... will a shoulder due? This one is a keeper..... |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Just when I thought I had fallen far enough another brutal impact sends me to my knees. I am weeping again and even a hand will not hold me steady. Aww Jen, you sure can make even pain sound hauntingly beautiful. And yep, I’ve lived all this….and trying to avoid having to live it again. You can never win or lose |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I used to say to myself "it can't get any worse" I've since learned to keep my mouth shut. excellent write as usual thanks for venting here |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
the down and dirty of pain--truly excellent write!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You always reach down into the deepest, darkest spots, and somehow make this bitterness palatable with your incredible, unique style. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Jennifer, your poetry has been so very sad lately, sweet friend, I hope everything is alright! (sigh) Now post a very special happy Christmas poem for us all, God Bless You, you are loved by us all, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jennifer, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-22-2002 11:00 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you write the sadness well...I'm there with you on this. |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
"And I should be beautiful" Beauty is best seen when we look with better eyes. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. [This message has been edited by Moonlight Romeo (12-23-2002 08:31 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
have I ever? yes I have, and it just happened again. Sometimes I feel like your poetry should come wrapped in an impact warning. whew. ouch. |
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