Open Poetry #24 |
It's been a while, but hey! |
diphycue New Member
since 2002-10-28
Posts 8Rolla, Missouri, USA |
Alright, this will be some free form poetry, just spewed from my brain as I'm typing, not exactly sure where I want to go with this, but I have a few ideas, so here goes, hope you enjoy. Merry Christmas she said Before taking my head In her hands and kissing me Softily she sighed As I touched her I cried Cause I knew soon we would part. Still there's the fear inside Hesitating I hide Wondering if it could be I am willing to try I'm just hoping that I Won't end up breaking her heart. Well, there it goes, I hope it was decent enough, I know I'm not much of a poet, but hey, art just reflects life and things, so it accomplishes what I wanted it to. Jesse |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
I think its a great start.....cant wait to read the finish..... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
It has lots of emotion and feeling. Thanks "Love makes the world go around" |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Still there's the fear inside Hesitating I hide" emotions poured out I think love can be a scary thing |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good write, I enjoyed this. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Keep spewing, Jessie. Some of my own personal favorites have been spontaneous combustion poems. |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Jesse, This was wonderful...she must feel very lucky to have someone who cares so much about her. And I'm sure she feels the same. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone |
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Angel_of_Music Junior Member
since 1999-07-25
Posts 35Sanger, TX USA |
Wow, this is beautiful, both in love and in uncertainty. I certainly wish I were the girl you were writing about! "In sleep he sang to me...in dreams he came...that voice which calls to me, and speaks my name..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
diphycue Well done, Merry christmas. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
I'd not seen your writing before, but very much enjoyed it. I'm also curious about your "handle". For me, Diff EQ also prounounced diphycue is Differential Equations and wondered if you were a mathematician. Just curious. Ken J Hope you write more often, I've found this a very supportive group. Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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