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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2002-12-21 05:33 PM

they are losing me

they are losing me
the words flit in
then out
they are playing games
and my muse
she slowly
strums a flute
it simply comes to her
to begin adding song
to the lyrics
that are losing me
and thus I have gone
beyond repute

he read a line
she heard a sigh
somewhere
out and
over there
a concert of form
a line bygoes the norm
when one hears
the birth of
a corm … grow…
they are losing me
and no one sees
no one knows…
how those simple little
varied lines
will glow

simple comes in subtle desire
I read a line
I become fire
but nevertheless
in my haste, I confess
I hurry to write, I then redress
each word, each stroke, each
so fine a line
and ask self, were these mine?
were they ever of grand
design?
or are they simply
words of sine….

to be curved in and
then carved without
a poddling, seed, a winsome
doubt
a tadpole, fry, of little
scheme
to grow fruitful, to fulfill
all kindred dream
to be held, and warmed, a
grand origin
holds me safely,
without the sin

but they are losing me
the words
I would pen
in a gift I would give
and then yet
again
I would keep them
all so close to vest
but ‘neath sun, by wind
they would visit,
see?
as surely as they are
losing me

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

1 posted 2002-12-21 05:38 PM

Well, I think this poem suggests that they are NOT losing you...or vice versa. Nicely said, SUnshine

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

2 posted 2002-12-21 05:53 PM

Sunshine - you do write them well, you surely do.

BC

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

3 posted 2002-12-21 06:05 PM

that feeling frightens me also,
but youve certainly wordfully expressed it
well

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2002-12-21 09:08 PM

"simple comes in subtle desire
I read a line
I become fire
but nevertheless
in my haste, I confess
I hurry to write, I then redress
each word, each stroke, each
so fine a line
and ask self, were these mine?"

this could have been a poem all on it's own

enchantingvamp
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since 2002-12-21

Posts 214
Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas!

5 posted 2002-12-21 10:53 PM

liked this very much.....took me a sec to get into it then it just smacked me right between the eyes....

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2002-12-21 11:03 PM

Karilea, it doesn't seem that your words ever lose you, lady. All your words written are excellent...

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2002-12-22 02:50 AM

YOU lost for words! Never in a million years. Very cook write lady poet person

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