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Red's Proposal
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She saw his truck as she pulled in Sitting there dripping oil like it always did And the green purple pool that floated In the puddle behind it caught her eyes Reminding her of the jack falling And how the bruise colored A lot like that. She pulled in next to him And raised his hood Grabbed the coil wire And jerked. ………………………………. Red’s was mostly empty But Travis was sitting on the corner A beer in front of him Staring at the table. Iambe slid into the seat opposite his And waived at the barkeep “Bring me a shot of Ezra.” His eyes looked like dust. Old and powdered from too many storms But still had a sparkle when he smiled She just didn’t remember him smiling much. Barkeep brought her drink and sat it down. “Another” she ordered as she picked it up “In fact, bring the bottle and another glass Red.” Travis gave her a rare grin and asked, “You know I plan on driving on tonight?” “Yeah, I figured.” She answered “But seeing as how it has been a while, you can drink a couple with me.” Red brought the bottle and glass Nodded to her and asked, “You want it on your tab Iambe?” “Sure do Red, thanks.” She replied After a couple of shots and some small talk About Wyoming winters and New Mexico summer heat Travis screwed up his courage and looked her in the eyes. “What you really want Iambe?” “You.” She replied. “Not likely you want me.” He said with lowered head. “You’d just have me there a while then want me gone again.” “Maybe,” she started, “ but you know you were right.” “We are damned in our wanting.” “The part about tangled up was wrong though.” “What makes us ugly is the scars.” He looked at her with wary surprise. “ Look, Iambe, I’ve got to go.” He stuttered and rose to his feet. “Sure,” she said, and poured another sip of Ezra. She gave him 5 minutes Counting the seconds off the “Old Milwaukee” clock That hung on the wall above the door Then picked up the bottle and headed outside. He was still there Cranking the engine and pounding on the steering wheel. “You know you are going to have to ride with me.” She yelled at him. “Your coil wire is bad.” He looked at her with a half smile “How you know that?” he asked. “I cut it.” She said as she walked over to the drivers door of the old Scout. “Get in.” she said, “I’m giving you a ride.” The old Scout headed back out onto 132 And Iambe switched the radio on. ........................................ You can leave me anytime you want to, I’ll not keep you here You needn’t live in worry and you sure can’t love in fear Wrap me in your arms now and take me in your heart You can leave me in the sunlight if it true that we must part Tonight I want you darling to chase away these tears ....................................... Travis felt her hand take his And then heard Iambe ask him, “marry me?” He looked at her and knew his eyes must look ike a deer in headlights. "What?" he asked. "You always were a damned fool." She laughed. (to be continued) [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (02-14-2003 05:25 PM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
ha... Tsk! perfect ending....quite real....!!! I also enjoyed the story line, and the true ending I am sure will be a shocker....Mmmmmmm???? Though, of course hope it never ends. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (02-14-2003 04:52 PM).] |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Me thinks I missed part of the story, but enjoyed the section all the same. Peace. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Cap'n! Is she sure? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Pat... never really know do you...whether it is the ending here or the beginning of yet another run.... marrying Iambe would be a pretty scary proposition.. Andrew: bud you haven't missed anything if you haven't read the others I have done on Iambe.. thanks for dropping in..and the nice words. Sunshine ( evil grin) I doubt either one of them is sure of anything when it comes to getting along... and no one said he was saying yes, now did they.... but then again maybe he will...and she'll wake up with cold feet... figure it can hang awhile...and I'll debate what to do with them...in a couple of months or so... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
No way?!!! Well...maybe...but, I'll bet they don't. LOVE THIS!!!! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Lemme pick myself up from the floor... Just when I think you can't twist this around any more...wham! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
So interesting. I added to my original reply, before you replied. True, I have still not gone back to read the beginning of her, however in these few I've read recently I thought it was he whom she was waiting for to 'soul heal', not her. She is simply a handful, huh? Ha! She just now had a moment of weakness....with the marry me, that's all, right? smiling and loving these...Of course, you know I hardly come up with poet's intention and read into poems my interpretation. will be fun to follow....thanks. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Nancy, Duncan, Pat... Truth is I didn't have the hear tot finish it the way I knew it would end... not on valentines day... but if you had to read the real ending to this it it would best be read on another day... I'll let them have tonight and the weekend along with everyone else that wants to believe in real romance and love to make it out to be something sweet... maybe next week I'll write the second half of this one... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I had to come back for some more, you've caught my interest with these tales |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Cpat Hair - enjoy these writings. You do have a wonderful sense of humor, very nice... BC |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Capt., it's good that you didn't make them break up on Valentine's Day....now isn't it? You may have to hide in the cornfield with Duncan, if you make all us hopeless romantics disappointed...LOL Don't wait a couple of months, like you said earlier, though, okay????  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Reminding her of the jack falling And how the bruise colored A lot like that. =========================== “What you really want Iambe?” “You.” She replied.  “Not likely you want me.” He said with lowered head. “You’d just have me there a while then want me gone again.” “Maybe,” she started, “ but you know you were right.” “We are damned in our wanting.” “The part about tangled up was wrong though.” “What makes us ugly is the scars.” He looked at her with wary surprise. “ Look, Iambe, I’ve got to go.” He stuttered and rose to his feet. ================================== “You know you are going to have to ride with me.” She yelled at him. “Your coil wire is bad.” He looked at her with a half smile “How you know that?” he asked. “I cut it.” She said as she walked over to the drivers door of the old Scout. ============================= Travis felt her hand take his And then heard Iambe ask him, “marry me?” He looked at her and knew his eyes must look ike a deer in headlights. "What?" he asked. "You always were a damned fool." She laughed. (to be continued)  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
quote: sheesh..even on Valentines Day a moth cant dream??? LOL OK Ok... If youre gonna break me mothy heart with the ending...then HURT ME SOOOO GOOD  LOL |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You can leave me anytime you want to, I’ll not keep you here You needn’t live in worry and you sure can’t love in fear Wrap me in your arms now and take me in your heart You can leave me in the sunlight if it true that we must part Tonight I want you darling to chase away these tears =============================== you didnt think I missed the rhyme did you??? *sigh* |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
it is 2 a.m. and i'm sitting here with some "scary smooth", water, Lionel Richie love songs, tears in my eyes, and this darn pc. I've quite given' up on that guy i was talkin' about....after tonight. Put on top of that my father's problems...and I'm a mess..... so, make that ending a really good "BAD" one....if you're gonna do it, might as well do it right.... *sigh* Sometimes love can be so cruel, sometimes we learn by bein' a fool, I don't know why girl why we've lasted so long, it may be the one that keeps us strong. You know that I'm so glad to say, that it all turned out this way, cause you know that it almost slipped away, oh baby, when we manage to stay alive, we've found that only the strong survive, so I just had to tell you baby.... sometimes love can be so cruel Lionel Richie [This message has been edited by KristieSue (02-15-2003 02:05 AM).] |
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