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Open Poetry #24

Not crack nor blemish

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

0 posted 2003-02-12 10:34 AM

Though my wall I heard your voice
sincerely. I listened by way of
the cracks that had lonely had left.
The voice spoke of friendship
and walls crumbling- I longed to hear
more. I longed to feel a human touch.
I took out a few bricks.

We talked.

Through the weakness in my
defenses we touched.
My heart leapt toward my wall
crumbling an even larger
opening, only to find you missing.
A stranger was knocking
and you had gone to let her in.

You returned, stranger in tow.

I left no trace of crack or blemish
I keep my mortar ready.

[This message has been edited by jellybeans (02-13-2003 02:34 PM).]

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2003-02-12 10:56 AM

Ouch. Sounds a bit crowded... with sincerity doing magic tricks and vanishing.

As always, excellent write.

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

2 posted 2003-02-12 10:57 AM

yep......sigh...once in place,it is so much easier to maintain a wall than it is to find reason enough to break it down
thank you lady

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2003-02-12 11:03 AM

ah... your usual tightly woven form..and a touch of bitter regret..

nicely done my friend...

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

4 posted 2003-02-12 01:00 PM

very well done!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-02-12 01:01 PM

awesome!

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