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Corinne
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0 posted 2003-02-10 11:02 PM


To the naked, female eye,
he appears multifaceted  –
would have us believe his brilliance;
he can refract his depth of light
into a woman’s eyes:
a clear, cool drinking in.

Initially, there is scarcely a hint
of the tiny defects lying
beneath the smooth planes,
nearly masked by gaudy flash.

Judgment of him becomes clouded
as his own clarity dulls;
flaws gradually scratch
to surface,
until it is apparent
he is shallowly cut –
devoid of core

and

more flawed
than a discount diamond.

© 2003 Core

[This message has been edited by Corinne (02-11-2003 07:40 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-02-10 11:11 PM


Ouch! Cut glass with him!

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2 posted 2003-02-10 11:21 PM


Clapping my hands for your finesse in portraying a shallow man!

Warm hugs to you, dear Corinne!

Linda

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3 posted 2003-02-11 01:50 AM


Corrine, the ugliness of the inward man can certainly make the outside not be so appealing.  Right?  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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4 posted 2003-02-11 08:25 AM


A perfect portrayal... Too bad they're so good at hiding it till we're all wrapped up in them, eh???...
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5 posted 2003-02-11 08:28 AM


Another wonderfully written poem about Balladeer.....great job gal...
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6 posted 2003-02-11 08:30 AM


Cor.. hunny... now I know you done went and saw through old Toe.. but this one may hurt his feelings, him being sensitive and all like he is.. (laughing)

nicely done... and seriously....
we all have flaws and our initial impression on people is often one they change over time as they discover the imperfections and inconsistancies in us. I know there are people who use the facades they construct to manipulate people and this poem fits well with describing such a person.


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7 posted 2003-02-11 09:02 AM


Oh, boy... I've sure encountered some of these... (And no, Cpat... not Toe. *G* He's as good as good could ever get *G*)

Excellent write, Corinne! *S*

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8 posted 2003-02-11 09:05 AM


Cor,
A bit of truth, enjoyed.

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9 posted 2003-02-11 09:05 AM



Very good, Corinne...

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10 posted 2003-02-11 11:46 AM





Smiling here. You captured perfectly, a cunning scoundral...

Very talented, you are.

Enjoyed, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Corinne
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11 posted 2003-02-11 04:46 PM


Thanks everyone! My anti-valentine's day poem!

Cor

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12 posted 2003-02-11 05:27 PM


I could see it was not cupids darts but rather a dart tossed at cupid what inspired... anti valentine day poem.. now you have me thinking.. a new holiday...and one surrounded by the trappings of torn half hearts left hanging by edges...and perhaps candy that tastes like medicine for all..
we could send thistles instead of flowers
and write prickly pear poems extolling the virute of not being in love or caring...

You may be on to something here... I'm calling Halmark...and gicing them your name as a global contact for the formation of this new holiday.

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13 posted 2003-02-11 06:53 PM


Ha,ha,ha! Ron - you're good for the soul! yep, yep we could start a nasty little line at Hallmark!

Hmmm, perhaps you should start an anti-valentine's day challenge - you know that's the busiest day on this board - folks looking for poems to steal for their loved ones.

I would love to do "anti" cards - I have a very warped sense of humor. My Thanksgiving E-Card last year was called "Psycho Turkey" and featured a turkey prepared by Norman Bates (after Norman stabbed the poor turkey to death while it took a shower) - it ends with Norman and the turkey on a platter - saying "Mother wishes you a happy thanksgiving!" hee hee!

Cor

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14 posted 2003-02-11 06:56 PM


p.s. Toe and Deer - you know this isn't about either of you sweethearts!

Cor

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Sweet poet, great write. I must agree all diamonds would be flawed when devoid of cor.

Parker

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16 posted 2003-02-12 12:26 PM


Scathing, loved this
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17 posted 2003-02-12 12:39 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) That's why we call them blood diamonds, they are not guilty but just ignorant of the true worth of that kind of love and broken hearts can bleed all the sae like that! (sad sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, you always write so well, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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