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When He Isn't a Gem
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When He Isn't a Gem |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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To the naked, female eye, he appears multifaceted – would have us believe his brilliance; he can refract his depth of light into a woman’s eyes: a clear, cool drinking in. Initially, there is scarcely a hint of the tiny defects lying beneath the smooth planes, nearly masked by gaudy flash. Judgment of him becomes clouded as his own clarity dulls; flaws gradually scratch to surface, until it is apparent he is shallowly cut – devoid of core and more flawed than a discount diamond. © 2003 Core [This message has been edited by Corinne (02-11-2003 07:40 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ouch! Cut glass with him! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Clapping my hands for your finesse in portraying a shallow man! Warm hugs to you, dear Corinne! Linda |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Corrine, the ugliness of the inward man can certainly make the outside not be so appealing. Right?  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A perfect portrayal... Too bad they're so good at hiding it till we're all wrapped up in them, eh???...  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Another wonderfully written poem about Balladeer.....great job gal... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Cor.. hunny... now I know you done went and saw through old Toe.. but this one may hurt his feelings, him being sensitive and all like he is.. (laughing) nicely done... and seriously.... we all have flaws and our initial impression on people is often one they change over time as they discover the imperfections and inconsistancies in us. I know there are people who use the facades they construct to manipulate people and this poem fits well with describing such a person. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, boy... I've sure encountered some of these... (And no, Cpat... not Toe. *G* He's as good as good could ever get *G*) Excellent write, Corinne! *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cor, A bit of truth, enjoyed. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Very good, Corinne... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Smiling here. You captured perfectly, a cunning scoundral... Very talented, you are. Enjoyed, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks everyone! My anti-valentine's day poem! Cor [This message has been edited by Corinne (02-11-2003 04:47 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I could see it was not cupids darts but rather a dart tossed at cupid what inspired... anti valentine day poem.. now you have me thinking.. a new holiday...and one surrounded by the trappings of torn half hearts left hanging by edges...and perhaps candy that tastes like medicine for all.. we could send thistles instead of flowers and write prickly pear poems extolling the virute of not being in love or caring... You may be on to something here... I'm calling Halmark...and gicing them your name as a global contact for the formation of this new holiday. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ha,ha,ha! Ron - you're good for the soul! yep, yep we could start a nasty little line at Hallmark! Hmmm, perhaps you should start an anti-valentine's day challenge - you know that's the busiest day on this board - folks looking for poems to steal for their loved ones. I would love to do "anti" cards - I have a very warped sense of humor. My Thanksgiving E-Card last year was called "Psycho Turkey" and featured a turkey prepared by Norman Bates (after Norman stabbed the poor turkey to death while it took a shower) - it ends with Norman and the turkey on a platter - saying "Mother wishes you a happy thanksgiving!" hee hee! Cor |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
p.s. Toe and Deer - you know this isn't about either of you sweethearts! Cor |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Sweet poet, great write. I must agree all diamonds would be flawed when devoid of cor.  Parker |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Scathing, loved this |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) That's why we call them blood diamonds, they are not guilty but just ignorant of the true worth of that kind of love and broken hearts can bleed all the sae like that! (sad sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, you always write so well, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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