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Black Swan Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 165on the moon 
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misplaced my soul replaced by a hole with a little voice saying sorta a waste anyway when the moon catches my eye and the streetlamps orange light engulfs my veiw i think of you tortured feeling,your face im dreaming, you left me hanging still untangling the knots you tied totally engulfed i was emersed in a feeling i once again am craving for praying more trusting less reading your old letters,my rooms a mess dont bother to ask why not wasting my time this way i find myself less connected i find myself rejected its okay i never trusted you anyway |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
You catch a mood in such a new and fresh way...and bring the reader to a shared and familure place. Eric |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Black Swan - well written, well said... BC |
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gypsy girl Junior Member
since 2003-01-09
Posts 12Pennsylvania, USA |
I really, really like this....the rhythm is odd, even for a conversational piece but it works fabulously...there's a distinctive voice to the poem that gives it strength.  |
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