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Open Poetry #24

It's up to you

rm711
Member

since 2002-11-30

Posts 131
Wiltshire, England

0 posted 2003-02-10 04:52 PM

I’m back up there
Making my way
Up each stair
Things always in my way

But I get there
Every time
To my sanctuary
My place in time

Things fall apart
Things come together
All right here
Under my sun

The heat beats me down
The cold is harsh
But I’m laying this all down
Letting you way in

This would be
My time to see
But I give it to you
Do what you want to do

But don’t forget me
I may blur away
But I’m always in the corner
Of the room

In my shadow
My voice is on surround
And even when you sleep
You will hear every word

Each tear that hits the ground
Because you made that choice
It’s up to you
Not to bring me down.

small insignificant useless me

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-02-10 04:53 PM

This is beautiful

Cold hands means a warm heart

BlueEyes
Member

since 2002-08-30

Posts 152
TX, USA

2 posted 2003-02-10 05:07 PM

I loved this....

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2003-02-10 06:27 PM

Lovely poem. It's up to you too!
Margherita

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

4 posted 2003-02-11 07:10 AM

In my shadow
My voice is on surround
And even when you sleep
You will hear every word

I love this idea of "surround voice"

a very good verse/phrase/sentence
*s
M

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