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Black Swan Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 165on the moon 
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i cant think i cant breathe my hands are shaking my soul is quivering i know that was you i saw from afar i was in the window i know u saw me too couldnt move wanted to run outside or better yet i ran to hide i couldnt face you i couldnt feel my heart i cant believe that was you it was you i havent seen you for so long my god thinking about it hurts so much |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You nearly left me breathless...what a rush of emotions! The presentation really fit the feelings portrayed. Well done! |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
What a sad scene you paint! I know the painful imagery here can be replaced with hope - a new love. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, I know that hurt well |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
I think we can all relate to the feeling. very well written |
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