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Sensitive Plant
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Sensitive Plant |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Mimosa Pudica Touch it, Only touch it, One sensitive leaf, and-- It wilts like an umbrella; like This man. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Beautiful Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
One of my favorite plants, but its personality IS a bit too close to mine, for comfort..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed--There is alot of power in a cinquain when done right...this is done right. Enjoyed! |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Very well done! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done... question though... not familiar with the form and the rules so it may be a part of those that require using "like" twice in the verse..if so..pardon my ignorance..if not..that is the only thing I found distracting in the whole... it is well done either way..and I enjoyed. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
It is great to see various forms used when writing poetry. I have to say I enjoyed the sentiment in the poem greatly. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I think the "right" touch would turn the wilt to melt. I liked this. Susan C. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*mouth hanging open* |
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