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Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

0 posted 2003-02-09 06:13 AM

I could bleed sorrow
onto the page
envying that
which
I have no talent to pursue
and you would yet soar
to the stars
with me on your comet tail
waiting for the dust of your passing
to cover me
so that some glimmer
of your shine
would be reflected
in my stolen shadows

I could use the malice
that burns within me
to paint your future dark
as you have painted mine
and you would still rise above me
to paint the words of
my paucity
for all the world
to see
while I cling
to the darkness
of my knowing

I am better than you
I am!
and yet in proving
my worth
I must bide in the
shadow of your wings
a little longer
as you teach
and heal
to show me the universe
from your perspective
that I may
one day escape
the protection of your wing
and soar to the sun
until the wax of you
is melted from
between
the pinions of my wings

Only then will I be free of you.
And you of me…

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

bbent
Senior Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 521
Alaska

1 posted 2003-02-09 06:58 AM

Your talent shines through your writing Kethry,I wouldn't be in to big a hurry to leave cruising altitude.

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

2 posted 2003-02-09 07:24 AM

Kethry, you always amaze me with fresh thoughts and ideas!! What comes out at me here is that we can envy, but learn from it, and shape our own path! Thank you for this one, as I have learned something new today.

A truly happy person is one who
can enjoy the scenery on a detour!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2003-02-09 12:36 PM

Soaring to the top, again. I'll keep this one and re-read again later. Right now, I'm in need of a safe perch.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-02-09 12:36 PM

Very good poem

Cold hands means a warm heart

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2003-02-09 12:52 PM

Keth, this is outstanding. Yes, beyond
question. Nicely done..

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2003-02-09 12:53 PM

wonderful write...great message!

[This message has been edited by passing shadows (02-09-2003 12:54 PM).]

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

7 posted 2003-02-09 01:11 PM

Kethry, a "truth" poem that is written beautifully.
I enjoyed reading it::

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2003-02-09 03:11 PM

A wonderful write Lynne.
Enjoyed.
Maree

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

9 posted 2003-02-09 04:44 PM

Kethry - you're a special person, and your writings are also special...

BC

Peter J Marcroft
Member

since 2003-02-02

Posts 265
York, England

10 posted 2003-02-09 05:32 PM

I like this poem, I like it alot, especially this part...

until the wax of you
is melted from
between
the pinions of my wings

Nice link to the legend of Icarus here, very effectively done, good work

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

11 posted 2003-02-09 06:18 PM

You have such tremendous talent Keth...it shows in all you do

hugss
M

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

12 posted 2003-02-09 11:07 PM

I could bleed sorrow
onto the page
envying that
which
I have no talent to pursue
and you would yet soar
to the stars

Your poem moved me in so many ways.
I've seen it for myself,
she who soars beneath his wings,
while I bury my head in the clouds
and try not to look.

Maybe it's time to take an elevator ride
Ya think?

(I'm still laughing at that one)

You've a wonderful talent and a mighty pen Kethry.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

13 posted 2003-02-09 11:14 PM

Gadzooks, Keth! This was fantastic!

Warm hugs,
EA

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

14 posted 2003-02-11 07:01 PM

Keth beloved one, oh the ease of which you write such marvels. The delicacy of your writing is the gift of such artistry, you blend the shades of this in such a wonderful way that you take the lesson and show it for what it is. In all things there is a lesson, and you show that so clearly.

As always beloved one you know I love this, and no you have no conceit in you, but if you did you’d know the superb quality and depth of this exquisite poem. One day when I’ve learnt to be half the writer you are I shall envy you, but until then I shall simply stand and gasp at the way you weave the words into such perfection. Truly excellent beloved one

Love you always
Anf forever
Slushy

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

15 posted 2003-02-11 07:38 PM

I'm just speechless here Keth.

When can I place an order for your book?

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

16 posted 2003-02-12 11:24 AM

I'm gonna ditto Titia... cause I'm in that same boat... struck dumb with awe and admiration... and wanting to experience that silence again and again. *S*

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