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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-02-08 10:53 AM


Oh how courageous is my heart to warrant such a dream
and tell me that I laugh again in the midst of forest keep
whisper willows bending low to whisper to me all that seems
stark against the moon in full and even mystery's asleep.


Sage in tender foot of strength that yearns a certainty of path
Talks of pipe and feathers burn in ceremony of the way
Bloodroot from another day has burned into the wisdom ash
tell me there is truth untrue and just one jury I can sway

I would plead unmercifully and our children will bemoan
the dust of stars fall down on them in thier own conformity
and they will beat the uniforms on the rocks they call their own
and they will walk the path again--backwards in absurdity.

Simplicity drawn in the sand.
Beginning and the end of man...

(and just a possibility...)

*    *    *

"Oh how courageous is my heart to warrant such a dream"--Liz Santos


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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2003-02-08 11:03 AM


serenity,
"Oh how courageous is my heart to warrant such a dream."

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2 posted 2003-02-08 11:03 AM


tell me there is truth untrue and just one jury I can sway
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And I will dance in the woods with you, when we find a truth that will sway.

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Aenimal
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4 posted 2003-02-08 01:25 PM


Words dance upon the screen
from the pen of the Serene
devoured by eyes and swallowed whole
script forever etched on soul

don't you ever stop. hugs


nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2003-02-08 01:44 PM


and they will walk the path again--backwards in absurdity.


loved it.. did you take a line from Liz's

  that's what I think I might do for mine..I love that idea, thanks Karen
hugssssss
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6 posted 2003-02-08 03:10 PM


Beautiful Serenity!
I can't do sonnets...but will do a couple of Valentine posts as the day draws nearer.
Liz will be tickled with this.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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7 posted 2003-02-08 03:39 PM


This is absolutely stunning K, absolutely!

adding this to my library and I'm with Ralph, don't you stop, ever! ok.

hugs gorgeous

Maree.

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8 posted 2003-02-08 04:13 PM


Oh how courageous is my heart to warrant such a dream
and tell me that I laugh again in the midst of forest keep
whisper willows bending low to whisper to me all that seems
stark against the moon in full and even mystery's asleep.


Sage in tender foot of strength that yearns a certainty of path
Talks of pipe and feathers burn in ceremony of the way
Bloodroot from another day has burned into the wisdom ash
tell me there is truth untrue and just one jury I can sway
===================================
Simplicity drawn in the sand.
Beginning and the end of man...

====================================


I AM GIDDY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Gawwwwwd I love the way you rhyme...
and the alliterations and imagery in this cadenced kissed gem make me moth high!!!
Those verses are poetic GOLD girl!!

YOUR RHYMES ROCK...and it rolls me

VIALS BABY...SEND VIALS


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9 posted 2003-02-08 04:16 PM


Karen, this is beautiful......

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 2003-02-08 04:25 PM


Oh, you've made an absolutely beautiful poem from just a line. I feel honored. Your have cleverly wrought your sentiments into this wonderful verse
You are amazing
Liz

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2003-02-08 06:15 PM


"from just a line."

Oh Liz...I wish you knew just how wonderful a poet you really are.

just a line?

WHATTA  LINE!!!

oh lady liz...thank you



and thank you all...


serenity blaze
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12 posted 2003-02-08 06:16 PM


ooops.

got all excited there. grin.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-08-2003 06:16 PM).]

Martie
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13 posted 2003-02-08 07:46 PM


serenity...me too, I got excited...your voice is exceptional ya know...
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14 posted 2003-02-09 12:00 PM


Well mercy me Mrs. Serenity if that was not the most beautiful ditty I have read in some time, and truly a string of rhyme devine!  Gotta love Lizzy - she inspires for sure (doesn't shop too well but inspires) LOL wonderful lady!

~ The soul lies buried in ink that does not flow ~
        

Nan
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15 posted 2003-02-09 08:07 AM


Pretty kewl write, lady serenity... Gotta love that Lizzy, eh?... She's some pretty good inspiration.. But then you're some pretty good writer as well...
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