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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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Delusional and delirious My mind has lost its content. And my head is spinning round And round. The stars I see are quite amusing Mind is stirring, thoughts confusing. CdoauelDIeB …heaven’s greater Its two AM and getting later. Disillusioned trying to dance, A snickering smile, then I prance. And as you walk away I’m back with head in fingertips. My tears dried upon arrival By the starlight’s Dance recital. Playing right before my eyes With fireworks In all the skies. Wait till the clouds Of pain Come and suffocate me. ‘Till then I’m living here, Watching light shows Which you, in your mobility, Can’t see. - And so it was that time stood still - |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Guess I should explain. I couldn't come up with anything to write... and this is just describing what I see during a migraine pretty much. And then the weird word in there is three words, an anagram type thing. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - (blink, breathe, stand, fight) [This message has been edited by GG (02-09-2003 04:57 AM).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A trip inside your head - That's quite an experience... 'Tis one difficult to describe, no doubt - And yet you've done a grand job of it...  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I enjoyed this write...like the style |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
It shows that there is always something to write about. And you did it so well and so descriptive. Great job! Eric |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, Anagram? Phooey, cause I love crytograms....assuming the capitol letters beginning of each of three words....I can't see them... I get cloud, I get Bleed, & I got a headache, but not had coffee yet.... smiling at your comment and built-in cleverness...didn't have anthing to write about? Hmmmm...If that is the case I can't wait for the poem which is preplanned...that'll be award winning, I am sure... Enjoy your talent....quite a descriptive piece... I liked: "by the starlight's dance recital" Hugs and love, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Nan, My head is a frightening place, isn't it? But I'm glad you think it grand! Thank you. Dixie, Thanks! Eric, yes, yes, there is! Thank you much sir. Pat, oh so thatsss what you call it! I was wondering.. but anagram, crytogram, as long as you get the point!! Oh and yes the caps do mean a new word, and the first word is Could ..wow and just now looking at it I realised I can't count, there's four words, not three. Ohh life is good *cough* And then, I guess 'couldn't put into words what I wanted to write' or more like 'couldn't think' would be better ways to describe my writing this. Glad you enjoyed. Hugs Time to go back to morning tears and some toast. Always, Alyssa PS, please pray for the family of my best friend Katie. For any who aren't. - And so it was that time stood still - (blink, breathe, stand, fight) [This message has been edited by GG (02-09-2003 09:41 AM).] |
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