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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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Underneath the ebb...and flow beyond the need...to know remains the question why? Apart from distance....and time withstanding reason....or rhyme remains the unspoken goodbye  ~SEA~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You're not leaving are you? This poses such a simple question and the uncertainty that comes without answers. Beautiful, really! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I may be reading this one wrong, but I hear longing and kind of a sad acceptance. Am I close? Nice seeing you here, Susan. Hugs and  The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Bluesy, nope, not leaving  Michael, yes, that is it in a nut shell. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Sea, What a simple yet deeply thought provoking tribute to one of the most enigmatic words known to humanity. PS For what it's worth, I certainly hope you're not going away from here! Rf |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Robert...thank you very much, and no, sorry, but you all are stuck with me  |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Oh...this is beautiful. It strikes as very Rumi like. There is a message in our longing...as Rumi himself said - "This longing you express is the return message." Once again....this is beautiful. (Oh...and I am happy your not leaving!) Eric |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
SEA - your words are always from your heart, must be a very tender one... BC |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Susan, this is very pretty, with a sad touch.. (BTW. I'm glad you're not leaving, too....)  |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Beautiful poem. It brings back so many memories of times when I had to say goodbye, and worse, when I didn't have a chance to say goodbye. Such a small word... But sometimes an unspoken goodbye can hurt so much... Blessings, El Campeador “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Being "stuck" with you? No, more like being blessed by your wonderful company. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Eric~ that's cool, thank you BC~ thank you, it is tender, I wear it on my sleeve Ethel~ thank you! El C~ yes, when good bye isn't said, it leaves so much confusion and hurt...thanks so much Michael~ you don't have to kiss up, you know what you are getting for your birthday already (thank you) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Loved this. Sad and open to interpretation, the loss of a loved one, the loss of an ideal, the loss of ones marbles etc.. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Raph~ marbles?? we don't need no stinking marbles...lol thanks  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yep, I can relate, SEA. (((HUGS))) I see this on different levels: saying that silent goodbye to a person, to an ideal, to a dream, or a desire of the soul. Very well done! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
SEA~ I always love reading your work and this is no exception...just beautiful. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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dhicks03 Member
since 2002-12-26
Posts 267Missouri,USA |
Wow, really liked this one. Reminds me a bit of a piece I wrote. I'll post it if I can find it. Dennis |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
But then, we only hear what we can bear... |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
Goodbye is the hardest word to say.....whether it be to a person....place or thing. When our hearts are attached.....it is difficult to let go. Great job on the poem though.....I understand completely.....love the pic by the way. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Susan, this is so very sadly beautiful, sweet friend, I hope it isn't really goodbye as I know that premonition and it can be so difficult to deal with! (sigh) I send angel hugs out, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank youn for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-08-2003 02:22 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Sea, I read this the same as Michael did... your feelings of loss came across. hugsss M |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Susan, this struck me, especially with the accompanying picture, as someone who intentionally did not say goodbye to a place..perhaps a place where they once lived..knowing that one day they would return. This is very beautiful. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know of this sad accepting |
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