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One Dance Too Late
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One Dance Too Late |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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Some days you put me out of your mind in some corner that you go back to when your heart is singing our favorite song. Its not that I want to be your infatuation understand? I'm just not used to sitting in the backseat of your life, and I'm still trying to break in the cold vinyl that seems to stick to me each time some old moment comes to conquer my senses. I don't love you anymore. Have I said that yet? So why do I still blush when you're around? In this time away have I become so much of someone else? I don't love you anymore but your shoulder was always comfortable and your lips still love mine. but this blush that comes when you're around made its grand re-entrance too late. ~~I Love You~~ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
oh my...h |
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Sun of faith Member
since 2003-01-31
Posts 101 |
*SIGH* very well writen. Can feel it |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
 ...Nicely said, Tempty... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Temptress As long as we live nothing is too late. Enjoyed |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Beautifully written temptress! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Temptress, there is always hope. You wrote of this feeling very well. Though it was sad, I enjoyed reading it.  |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Are we looking at ashes or embers? Can 'feel' it in this poem - the heat rising! |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
Too late, indeed. Usually too late. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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abbe Member
since 2003-01-20
Posts 131michigan, usa |
dang... i've been here. and thankfully got beyond "here" and happily can now say "what was I thinking... i deserved so much better than that!" good for you. great write |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Nicely written! This makes me feel like.. YEAH!! Maree  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
is it ever too late... I just lost my train of thought... trying to remember that feeling very nicely written, Jen |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful write, loved the ending |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
After 13 Years with my love,I now see some years were longer,Some years were empty,but the best years.....they are my soul. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I'm just not used to sitting in the backseat of your life, and I'm still trying to break in the cold vinyl Oooooooooo, this was more than good! Sad though...in this place where you're sitting while blushing and trying to deny the feelings, when you'd give anything to be sitting shot gun. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I felt this one, you wrote it well. I loved this part.. "and I'm still trying to break in the cold vinyl that seems to stick to me each time some old moment comes to conquer my senses." thats powerful, and I hope things get less painful. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I'm feeling so very much of this these days Jen, and your poem speaks volumes...Hugs. |
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