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Challenged
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Challenged I arose on a dream's edge walked the morning cold, freeze-dried thoughts staying with me until warmth regained its touch. The bitter cold and the strength of sun canceling each other out, leaving me luke-warm as I approach my day. I remain stranded, flooding myself with words and images, custom making my illusions to paint my day with promise. All too emotional, when it comes to loving you. Highs and lows, neutralizing my voice to counteract the threats of loss. "Every thing I do, I do for you", with you in mind, always wondering if I would catch your eye, bring forth a smile, or maybe a touch, if you were near. Would you notice the changes I go through, know my innermost thoughts that I hold in my darkened silence. Would you remember the sound of my voice or would you rather not. I think about chocolates and strawberries and wonder if they will have to be thrown out because their time has never come. This mind of mine crashes and burns daily, playing a never ending song of you while I chase shadows that challenge me to wonder. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." (Will Moss) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (02-06-2003 10:50 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Maureen, Too melancholy but a nice write, enjoyed. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
hmmmmmmmmm and I thought I was being a bit sentimental today, thinking good thoughts. Goes to show you, I can't even read my own moods  thanks Sy M |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautifuly written, and highly imaginative! Eric |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maureen, very beautiful, as is all of your poetry.......Loveya: |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
the song...played over and over...the hot and cold cancelling each other out...the discarding of chocolate and strawberries because "their time has never come"...the chasing shadows... the whole piece is just so me! |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Up until the fourth verse, you were describing how I felt today, but eventually as I read, for a different reason. This was my favorite part ~ so original and metaphorically good... I think about chocolates and strawberries and wonder if they will have to be thrown out because their time has never come. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Eric and Ethel thank you both for stopping to read me this morning. Dixie, I can always count on you knowing how I feel *s O, I bought chocolate tattoos and body paint and strawberry massaging syrup, on a day when I was feeling rather adventurous in thought and I still have yet to share it...probably won't be any good by then. Don't know what I was thinking!! M |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Loved all of this but these lines, The bitter cold and the strength of sun canceling each other out, leaving me luke-warm as I approach my day. speak volumes thanks for the post |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
thank you Aenimal for stopping to read *s that verse was just how I felt yesterday morning..it's been so cold here and the sun was trying to break it up but only could warm so much M |
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