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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2003-02-05 06:24 PM

You pull trees from the sea,
fractured and brittled by salt,
skeletal woods piling up in sticks
on the shore.

No match made can catch
that waterlogged tinder and timber.
The pines are years submerged.
Their only scent is spume and spray.

The birches' bark is torn like leaves
by a thousand books of rain.
The oaks will never know the soil
or acorn again.

Pull the sponges from the crowns.
Break brown barnacles on stones.
Walls of briney woodlands torn
by black chains and black weights.

A monstrous picture of that force.
"You left me that day."
No need left for those old tugs
cresting ancient waves.

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

1 posted 2003-02-05 06:39 PM

This is very desriptive and powerful. Great writing!
Eric

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2003-02-05 06:48 PM

"A monstrous picture of that force.
"You left me that day."
No need left for those old tugs
cresting ancient waves."

such painful expressions here....
wow Mike....

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-02-05 07:10 PM

Oh Mike...very powerful write here!
Left me breathless.
~Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2003-02-05 08:06 PM

"and his words made up the sand..."

so pretty. so sad. so YOU.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2003-02-05 10:27 PM

You pull trees from the sea,
fractured and brittled by salt,
skeletal woods piling up in sticks
on the shore.

No match made can catch
that waterlogged tinder and timber.
The pines are years submerged.
Their only scent is spume and spray.

The birches' bark is torn like leaves
by a thousand books of rain.
The oaks will never know the soil
or acorn again.

==============================

the images your words conjure are dark, layered, and lovely in their depth of vision.
miss ya squirrely one.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-02-05 11:01 PM

Mike, I enjoyed this. Very descriptive...

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

7 posted 2003-02-06 11:55 AM

I love this! Of all the poems I've read in the last several days, this one is my very favorite. It touches me like no other has.

Enjoyed greatly!

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2003-02-06 12:26 PM

"The birches' bark is torn like leaves
by a thousand books of rain."

stunning write, as always!

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

9 posted 2003-02-06 01:08 PM

Thanks, everyone. Something that just flew out of me, in measured cadence.

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