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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Optimism rolled over you as your eyes , saw the colors Had not changed The blue was still the waves Tinged green The white still sandy Of soft “Could it be?” with whisper you asked. For there was new The moth Drawn in shore where tide Meets low of land Footsteps led away In trail begging your follow To see who else Left hearts On strand. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
that eternal flame... even when it dims it burns... Cpat... this is wonderful! |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Beautiful words I just read here. Great write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
 you write so beautifully. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Good one, enjoyed the read. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile...this reminds me of something. I think I know just the pic to go with this.  Very very touching write. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'For there was new The moth Drawn in shore where tide Meets low of land Footsteps led away In trail begging your follow To see who else Left hearts On strand.' A path impossible to resist...good one Ron. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Incredibly beautiful..and much enjoyed! ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Capt., I love the beach and you painted a very beautiful picture of it in my mind,,,with a touch of romance, too....  |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Beautiful!!!!!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron--Wonderful write! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
"to see who else left hearts on strand" ..... Like the entire "picture".... Enjoyed, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love the ending especially |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
blue-green optimism, tinged with a strand of gold... Captain, you always give promise... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a very sweet you...your words M |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The blue was still the waves Tinged green The white still sandy Of soft =========================== For there was new The moth Drawn in shore where tide Meets low of land Footsteps led away In trail begging your follow To see who else Left hearts On strand. ====================== Hearts on strand, left in the sand...heart in hand... *sighing in blue...and thanking you again* very much  *library* |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
incredible.......and still I will repeat, you should publish these...your work is just increcdible |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Nice. Very Nice. I like the way you throw things into the foreground by dropping words out of a phrase, (or put in words that aren't expected) so that the reader gets to fill in the blank: "The white still sandy Of soft" .......Ratleader is taking lessons from your stuff. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Many a heart has been left in the sands. |
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poohbear19 Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 94Colorado, USA |
good poem |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Cpat loved this, simply beautiful |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
"Optimism rolled over you as your eyes , saw the colors Had not changed The blue was still the waves Tinged green The white still sandy Of soft “Could it be?” with whisper you asked" ...the question of the ages...lovely!!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) This is lovely, sweet friend, such an eternal vow is tied in a knot here, this is a colorful precious painting, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
this IS beautiful...h |
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