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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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I’m indulging myself, To chasms of the chamber Of the pain within my skin. I’m allowing myself to focus On the movement, on the breath, The eyelids drop, And furl of temple. Fist my hand To know I’m in no nightmare. Its shaded black And every scream I hear Is followed by a whimper, Murmur, All my own. I feel faint, Falling, Fading… Must be time To breathe again. Slowly, With a raspy, Whisper, Contritely I pull through. Taking strength, From ached muscles, Now, its time, To Blink. - And so it was that time stood still - (blink, breathe, stand, fight) [This message has been edited by GG (02-05-2003 04:34 AM).] |
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Dr Pepper Freak Member
since 2003-01-30
Posts 72CA |
Great job on this! Enjoyed it a lot! It's not the load that breaks you down, it's the way you carry it. ~ Lena Horne |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
This is very powerful and creative. Thanks for sharing this. Eric |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, Hmmmmmm! This is extremely well written. I suspect anyone who's ever had migraine's or worse, (one of the problems I've NOT had..gee, I didn't think there were any, smiling here,) can relate to this immediately..... and, even if not, easy to 'get the picture' with each descriptive phrase/line.... Enjoyed the talent of this..though ~blinking~ a couple tears for what some must suffer through. Hugs and love, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Dr pepper Freak, Glad you enejoyed it and think its great. I thank you for replying Eric, I'm glad you think so and for that, I'm glad I shared it too! thanks for taking the time to read and to reply. Pat, Worse then migraines!? *gasp* quitle close to impossible, and yet reality, frightening! I'm glad you think its well written, didn't take long to put together, they were my thoughts all night. But my migraines are more severe then what most have seen... though all are terrible. no tear blinking!  Love and hugs, Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully written, Alyssa! You are really talented! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Well now, migraines are something I can relate to. Allergies are frequently a cause, and swollen sinuses can trigger them. I actually found something recently that works for me...Pamprin! It is amazing how much better it works than Aspirin, Advil, Motrin etc. And cold compresses on the back of the head and neck. OK, I'm no Doctor Kacy, but the Pamprin works great for me if I catch the bugger at the very beginning. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Excellent and brilliantly written. Enjoyed the style of your write. ThisDiamond |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Denise, thank you. I feel honored, but am sure I don't deserve the title. Just another write.Midnitesun, Thanks for the advice, I'm seeing a few specialists as of now, so I'm sure something that helps me will come along sometime here. And I'm glad you found something to help. ThisDiamond, I appreciate your reply. I like trying out different styles, though I've never done meter... I can't count sylllables, its crazy! I'd go insane. but all that was to say thank you. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
my first migraine put me in the hospital. That was a trip...I don't get them very often, but when they hit, wow, they hit hard....relating... |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
SEA, sorry to hear that you can relate! I've been to the ER a few times with them. They just give demerol, which they don't like to give to 15 year olds, especially when they have to give double the adult amount for it to affect me!! But I deal ..by writing! Thanks for replying. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Alyssa, I certainly do relate, having had migraine's for quite a few years, now. They are really bad. Sorry to hear that someone so young suffers with this terrible pain. You wrote of them very well, friend.....  "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-06-2003 01:07 AM).] |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Ethel, I'm so so sorry to hear you've dealt with them too, and for so long. I wrote a bit in here about them when they spread to muscles, so that may seem unfamiliar, I'm hoping most don't actually, literally, wait to breathe and pass out like me. But ike I said before, I deal. Hoping your feeling well now And thank you much for replying so kindly. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
how terrible! I'm so sorry...I wish angel hugs could help...I'd send lots |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Dixie, I bet you would! and I thank you for that. I wouldn't be making it through without the support of wonderful friends Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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