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Over coffee |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I noticed the date on the front page this morning, at the waffle shop downtown. Last year, half a block away, I stared at the ceiling and ached for another moment. Thank you for giving me much more. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
nice read! are you talking about a loss though or of something you have found? either way, I enjoyed it - warm regards, Roniece  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes! There is a certain state of being in which you check the paper to be sure what day it is.....I like your little pictures. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...damn |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you do capture a moment don't you |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I read a beautiful tribute. ThisDiamond |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I can picture you coming back to the coffee shop and just standing there for a moment before you realise what your doing, then walking on, sitting down, sipping your coffee and writing this. Enjoyed Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I think you know how much this one resounded in me. Maybe some things aren’t meant to last forever, but are just beautiful for what they are, and the smile of the memories they bring back. Thank you for this. You can never win or lose |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your words mark a time in place that brings back a memory that's worth remembering. Nice one Dunc~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Duncan, this is lovely, sweet friend, I think you are the photographer of words, sweet friend, every tentative blink of an eye means so much more! (big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What a beautiful way to say thanks for the memories to that very special woman. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ya make me mothy heart proud to be a poet.  ~~~~ Into the morning light Followed by madness Reach through the empty fight Searching through sadness Pictures and photographs Memories and windows Goodbyes and epitaphs Heartbeats and hellos Are you waiting for Heart in hand Woman and man See me, where I stand I am ... Heart ... Heart in hand. Vertical Horizon  [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (02-05-2003 12:25 AM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Duncan, You said a whole lot in these few words, friend... I also read it as a tribute to someone very special......  Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a write |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
a "thank you"...and so much more---enjoyed!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Do you always intend to skip a heart in beat? You do it so well. |
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BlueEyes Member
since 2002-08-30
Posts 152TX, USA |
wow.... really makes you think. This was beautiful... BlueEyes |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey D... I'm going to burst the praise-bubble a bit... It is my esteemed opinion ~snicker~ that the poem would read so much better without the last stanza. It tells, rather than shows...the first two (wonderful) stanzas make for a poignant piece that leave the field for interpretation\response nicely open...  K |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
going to agre with Severn. The first two are strength..and left on their own open the poem up for much. The last..I see as only needed if truly planned for use as a personal thank you.. or tribute. I always enjoy Duncan... and the intent here defines whether the last whould stay or go. Only you know that. |
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