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Hypocrites and Cabinets
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Hypocrites and Cabinets |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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He deserved to die they'd said as if they'd had the power to pass such judgement Pointing fingers in disgust at drug dependency The same fingers pulling pills from countless bottles in the cabinet A pill for pain A pill for bliss A pill for gas A pill for pre A pill for post A pill for everything except compassion for hypocrites that couldn't see the disease had spread wider than they'd thought Prescribed and bottled above bathroom sink (For Layne and Shannon and all before and after) ____________________________________________________ NOT a condonation of drug use just a little compassion for those who are trapped by them both illegally and legally. A little more compassion and a little less judgement for mistakes people make. [This message has been edited by Aenimal (02-05-2003 09:49 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Very strong write. I liked it. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Yes, compassion and understanding are in short supply. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
AMEN, Raph. This is so true. I've seen people who have no compassion for anyone who is an illegal drug addict, and say very harsh things about them. Then, they take many prescription drugs that could be done without.....not needing them for any real medical disease or illness. Yes, this is hypocritical to me, too.... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
strong write! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
always sad when talent goes cause of drugs, ive been battling advil addiction for years, im not being cute, but its true, im addicted. and for that blind melon guy, [edited by moderator] , i would have liked to cure him , but good. [This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-05-2003 11:56 AM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thank you Loner sweet of you to say Kacy we should open a shop no? Thank you Ethel it's quite sad to see Thanks Dixie I try Yeah mish Shannon's death hit hard especially since it was a relapse, an talented poet and yeah I admit a good looking guy |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
hey there mister...big hugs...and yes, lots of understanding. More than i can say. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'The same fingers that pulled the pills from countless bottles in the cabinet' In the end, most of us are addicted...to something. Interesting write. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks SEA and hugs back thanks for all the suport Thatnks Duncan exactly the point wish more people realized it especially before they comment on others |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Amen!!!!!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Anyone with any kind of addiction has my sympathy... and my support in their struggle to rid themselves of same. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
The world's an unfair place, and will always have hypocrisy...ain't it grand? I like this... My suggestions? It you're doing a poem with no punctuation, it might be a good idea to break it up - and/or cut out the few initial capitals you have - they add a bit of extra bulk that isn't necessary I think...  K |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
excellent...its meaning very clear M |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Amen sandpiper Then the handle Sunshine is truly fitting Thanks Severn, thought the same but couldn't decide where to break it and still keep it cohesive, I've edited it hope it makes sense and thanks for the suggestions as always. thanks Nakdthoughts! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
much better...much much better.. Re-entering...after reading again, actually I think you'd do better to attach the 'A pill for' repetitions to either the verse below, or the verse above... K[This message has been edited by Severn (02-05-2003 04:22 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
A little better but seems bottom heavy, oh well I'll leave it at this for now, thanks for the insight Severn love when you stop by |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A little more compassion and a little less judgement for mistakes people make. ============================== Amen.....poignant write poet sir... well done. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thank you kindly Janet marie |
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